The Mermaid – Six Sentence Story

copyright c e ayr

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – WALK

Click here to hear the author read his words:

The Mermaid

Did I ever tell you about the time I fell in love with a Mermaid?
I was abroad, in a strange city, crossing a bridge high above dark water, when I saw this stunning, exotic lady.
The thing is that when I’m out on my daily walk, regardless of where I am, I move at a fairly relaxed stroll, so as I approached her I had time to study her face, analyse her expression, and understand the wistful ache in her eyes as she gazed down at the waves far far below.
I stopped to talk and she told me her story, how she was a mermaid who longed to return to the sea but was afraid because of a terrible life with a violent husband.
I took her home with me and we fell in love and spent happy years together until I realised how much time she spent with Colin, the handsome young chap at the fishmonger’s.
The next time we were out for our daily walk, crossing a bridge high above dark water, I asked her about him and she laughed, and so, knowing she could swim, I just threw her off.

‘Colin’ in French means coalfish (UK) or pollock (USA).
Just my little joke.

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25 Responses to The Mermaid – Six Sentence Story

  1. Lisa Tomey says:

    Well that ended with a splash!!


  2. LOL… well played! A great Six!


  3. clark says:

    Excellent ‘sharp-angle close’ (aka twist at the end of the story). Did not see that one coming.


  4. Chris Hall says:

    Wonderful! At the start I was thinking, ‘beware, mermaids’, and then you turned it around and that made me laugh. Bravo for bringing a smile to my face just after reading Denise’s scary Six 🙂


    • ceayr says:

      Thanks, Chris, glad you enjoyed.
      I admit to having mixed feelings about Mermaids.
      I have used them as hunters in the past, but also fell in love with one some years ago…


  5. Reading it, I am carried along easily by the audio of your Six and right up until the end found myself surprised and wanting to laugh. Such was your unexpected ending. Thanks for the smile C.E. 🙂


  6. Great story. Love the ending, forcing her to return to the sea.


  7. Quite a surprising tale!


  8. Pat Brockett says:

    Well, I wasn’t expecting that ending, but it was a great twist!
    At the beginning of your story, I was envisioning the Little Mermaid statue in Denmark. 🙂


  9. Frank Hubeny says:

    Very unusual way to break up a relationship.


  10. UP says:

    we all long to return to the sea…am i right? Good job.


  11. jenne49 says:

    Still smiling at this delightfully fantastic and dark tale.
    The word ‘just’ in the last line!
    But… She longed to return to the sea anyway. Hm.
    Did he punish her or did he save her?

    Liked by 2 people

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