Caught – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s photo
is by Ted Strutz, a regular supplier of interesting shots.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Ted Strutz


Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Caught

I guess I always knew I’d get caught.
What I did was pretty reckless.
Some might say foolhardy.
But nothing much ever happens around here.
I was bored, bored to distraction.
And she distracted me.
Then I had to flee.
Drove for days, hid out near the border.
No use.
I don’t know if I got spotted, or if it was the car.
No matter.
I know what the punishment will be.
There is no way round that.
But I had to do it.
Any last words?
Nah. I’ve nothing to say.
Any regrets?
Well, yes, obviously.
I got caught.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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80 Responses to Caught – Friday Fictioneers

  1. lisarey1990 says:

    Well put together. Great last line.

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  2. Ha! Love his last comment.

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  3. I really enjoyed this – you’ve created a full character through his voice, and given us enough of the story but enough for our imagination to fill in the spaces. Nicely done

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  4. Getting caught does rain on one’s parade.

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  5. Very cool – and love the recording to go with it!

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  6. Lynn Love says:

    He enjoyed his nefarious activities and then did a runner. Interesting how he’s resigned to being caught though, almost as if part of him wanted to be … Love how you hint at his crimes and leave us to fill in the blanks. Great writing C

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  7. Margaret says:

    He’s a nasty type. Lock him up and throw away the key I say. Love the voice in this. Perfect for the character.

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  8. Very effective few words..

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  9. He’s become a desperado out of boredom and seems to enjoy it, except the getting caught bit. He’s resigned to an, ‘oh well, it was good while it lasted.’ Sounds like his crime was something sinister as well. Nicely done.

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  10. subroto says:

    Regrets he has a few. Now he will be singing in the prison I guess.

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  11. gahlearner says:

    People who commit crimes out of boredom scare me even more than those who murder out of passion or craze. Nothing seems to get to them, no regrets, punishment seems completely pointless. Gives me the chills. Excellent story.

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  12. I like those short, fast sentences. Somehow, the structure speaks about his character more that words did.

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  13. Brilliant stuff, I loved the regret, well you would wouldn’t you?!

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  14. James McEwan says:

    Joy riders always get caught, well you know.

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  15. Alice Audrey says:

    Hahah – I LOVE that last line!

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  16. Anita says:

    Getting caught is no-no.
    But, we don’t have invisibility cloak!
    Interesting story.
    Car In Cyclone – Anita

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  17. Justice has a way of catching up with one. Near or far from any border.

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  18. He knew he’d get caught and didn’t seem to mind. Completely without remorse. You built the story very well. I really enjoyed, CE.

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  19. I came for the voice reading, the voice, and stayed for the story. Both are always a treat. Wonderfully drawn out, CE. Eloquent, chilling, with an edge of sarcasm. Nice!

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  20. Loved the narrative flow. Crime due to boredom…love the premise, Ceayr.

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  21. I think most people do get caught in the end… if nothing else by a bullet they put to their head… I had an inkling that his crime has to do with the mysterious “she”…

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  22. Abhijit Ray says:

    You naughty boy, what did you do? Why did you get caught? Did you do something naughtier after fleeing?

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  23. kislaya says:

    Sometimes we do get bored to distraction and do reckless things…
    If only he hadn’t got caught

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  24. Rowena says:

    Great, CE. I’m sure there are quite a few out there whose only regret was getting caught!
    Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Ro

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  25. With his luck, he’s sure to find a good-looking female jailer who’ll fall for him and allow him to escape 🙂

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  26. And his only regret that he got caught…that says more about his character than any of the rest!

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  27. pennygadd51 says:

    Rather a fascinating premise, that a man should commit murder through sheer boredom. Somehow you manage to make it convincing. Well done!

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  28. granonine says:

    One wonders how many other girls distracted him.

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  29. 4963andypop says:

    She distracted me. What weight that understatement carries!

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  30. StuHN says:

    Run, run, run…but you cannot hide.

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  31. Iain Kelly says:

    Amazing the amount of people who are profoundly sorry only after they have been caught for their crimes and misdemeanours.

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  32. Violet Lentz says:

    There’s always a rub isn’t there CE?

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  33. Sandra says:

    That penultimate line is dripping with sarcasm and irritation. Very good.

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  34. Dear CE,

    The repetition of knowing he’d get caught ending with ‘I got caught’ works well. Catchy story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  35. michael1148humphris says:

    A bit of a mystery, is he a bank robber or something worse. Yes a bit of a teaser.

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  36. neilmacdon says:

    I liked the way you conveyed a sense of sequence through the monologue. I loved it, but I wouldn’t use “flee” – it doesn’t fit with this voice

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