Route 66 – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant sing rock n roll
Though he undoubtedly has oodles of swagger
You think this is hooey
But he can’t go to St Louis
And he is not Chuck Berry or  mighty Mick Jagger

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Trip organiser Rochelle maps out the way forward for terrific travelling tale-tellers.
And AnElephant goes down a cul-de-sac.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Route 66

The last song I ever performed on stage.
Back when I still had an uncrushed larynx….
I am 19 years old, at a famous Scottish university, and front-man for a pretty average student band.
I am invited to spend my summer on tour with a chart-featuring outfit, as backup to the voice on their recordings.
He is described, quite charitably, as unreliable.
Amsterdam, the second night, and I am on.
Afterwards, still elated, I walk by the canals.
I see an elderly tourist being robbed, go to his aid.
I am punched to the ground.
Then I get my kicks.

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46 Responses to Route 66 – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Elephant, Great story and as they say “no good deed goes unpunished. . .” Marvelous! Have a good year! Nan 🙂


  2. Was this true? I hope not!! No good deed goes unpunished.


  3. Oh my, what a sad story. You delivered it so well.


  4. Oh, wicked way to use that last line. Well done.


  5. Really enjoyed your story and the twist at the end great.


  6. pattisj says:

    AnElephant is kicking up his heels! Loved your story (but sad) wrapped in a song.


  7. Margaret says:

    So young, with so muh promise – what a tragic tale. But he was brave, and his actions were noble. I really like your tone here – the last line is fantastic.


  8. What a great last line. Kicks indeed. Something about the overlay of this story and the song reminds me of Clockwork Orange and Singing in the Rain. Very well done.


  9. Love the image of you kicking the hell out of that robber!


  10. bonniehofkin says:

    Don’t forget Winona……


  11. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    Delightful pachyderm – loved how you used the song, and that vicious last line. Great little tale.


  12. Sandra says:

    Oh the savagery of that last line. Well done!


  13. Perfect last line to tie it all together!



  14. emmylgant says:

    Ah the intro is always so much fun!
    Your story packs quite a punch as well…
    I like the way you just hint at route 66 in the first line and close the circle with the last one. Nice.
    I got a kick out of it. 🙂


  15. Al says:

    Sad story. Very good though


  16. Well told and very sad. I have instant affection for your hero.


  17. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear AEC,

    Is this autobiographical in the least? I loved your story and the imagination that brought it to us.




  18. To be there on that verge of success and get your dreams crushed like that.. what a tragedy. I bet getting your kicks on Route 66 is better than in Amsterdam …


  19. Oh no! Fame and glory crushed so quickly. A great idea for a story!


  20. Dear Elephant,

    They say that kicks just keep getting harder to find…in this poor fella’s case, not so. Sad story, but he’s a hero nonetheless.

    Not sure which I enjoyed more, your story or your intro.




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