The Best Laid Plans – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant ever be organised
He is never on time he procrastinates
Although sometimes he wishes
He can wash and dry all the dishes
He usually ends up with broken saucers and plates

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Immaculately presented Rochelle creates a menu of tasty morsels to be cooked up by talented tale tellers.
And AnElephant burns the salad.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright – Jan Wayne Fields

Copyright – Jan Wayne Fields

The Best Laid Plans

The table is set perfectly.
The food – and the hired chef has prepared all of my wife’s favourite dishes – is simmering.
My instructions have been followed to the letter.
I stand at the window, waiting for someone I know will never come.
And my heart is breaking.
This whole thing is a charade, of course.
But I have to be here, I have to be seen to be here.
And everyone has played their part precisely according to my wishes.
Except her.
She always has to do something contrary.
She had the children with her in the car.

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18 Responses to The Best Laid Plans – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Dee says:

    Tragic and heartbreaking, well done Elephant


  2. Nan Falkner says:

    I’m with Helena – Double Dammit! Great story! Nan 🙂


  3. You think for just once she would listen.


  4. Dear Elephant,

    Deftly told gut wrencher.




  5. storydivamg says:

    The last line strikes with terror.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail


  6. bykimberlylynne says:

    Has to be “seen” to be here says it all. Damn her for not cooperating. Well done!


  7. emmylgant says:

    The perfect title for this stomach churning story.
    The elaborate charade becomes all too real.
    Like the pain.


  8. Margaret says:

    His determination to set the scene up perfectly is touching. His grief is heartbreaking. Well told.


  9. So tragic, you throw a heavy punch. A good one.


  10. Miss Nifty says:

    Oh my god. So sad. This prompt has made so many heartbreaking stories!


  11. BrainRants says:

    To me, he’s set up her death and just now realizes the tragedy he’s triggered.


  12. Sandra says:

    Well done. Beautifully told.


  13. Oh gosh this ending could go in so many directions.


  14. Oof. Not sure what happened, but I know it’s very bad. Nicely done.


  15. Heart-breaking.



  16. Devastating last line.


  17. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:



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