Fear of Flying – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant tell if this plane
Has wide enough seats to squeeze in his wee bum so
He sits on the wing
Has a swing and a sing
And – wait for it! – pretends he is Dumbo on a Jumbo

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Piloted weekly by Captain Rochelle, who charts a course for amazing aviatory adventures from her air-raising acolytes.
And AnElephant remains earthbound.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Fear of Flying

She wakens in a state of absolute dread, certain of the disaster to come.
All the way to the airport she begs him not to go, to at least postpone his flight.
She has a premonition of death, and her sixth sense is powerful.
She weeps at Departures, knowing in her heart she will never see him again.
Two hours later she is still in the viewing area, watching as his plane disappears over the Alps.
As she returns to her car, the boy snatches her handbag, thrusting her into the concrete pillar.
She never comes out of the coma.


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17 Responses to Fear of Flying – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Sarah Ann says:

    Wonderful twist. If only her sixth sense could have been slightly more directive.


  2. Nan Falkner says:

    Really good story – I have premonitions sometimes and almost all of mine have come to pass. This one is great and it is a twist to be her that would not see him again. Too bad – let the kid have the purse. Thanks, Nan


  3. Ellespeth says:

    oh my goodness! what a tense piece this is…enjoyed it and the opening Dumbo on a Jumbo 😛


  4. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear AEC,

    And does the plane crash, too?

    Good story and a sly twist on the usual.




  5. Elephant, Just about everything’s been said. Good writing from the intro to the ending twist. 🙂 —Susan


  6. Horus says:

    Always love your limerick on the top !

    …and this was a clever twist in the tale !


  7. Maybe could be subtitled, fear of driving.
    Wonder how he’ll deal with his guilt when he finds out that when he left this is what happened….


  8. storydivamg says:

    Dear Elephant,
    Now that’s a good twist. One tiny nit: Did you mean “a boy” instead of “the boy”?

    All my best,
    Marie Gail


  9. RoSy says:

    Oh my – Turns out it was her safety & not his.
    Nice twist! (Ok – maybe not that nice – but – you know what I mean…) 🙂


  10. That evil sixth sense steered her wrong. Delightful twist


  11. znjavid says:

    Great twist. Didn’t see it coming. As usual love your intro!


  12. wmqcolby says:

    Ah, the Old Switcheroo (not that it hasn’t been done before on this blog). Very good job, Elephant! Five wings.


  13. Judah First says:

    Great job! Love the opening poem (of course).


  14. Sarah says:

    Great twist!


  15. Dear Elephant,

    Well part of her premonition was correct. She’d never see him again. Quite a twist. (Dumbo on a Jumbo?…clever.)




  16. Al says:

    Not the death she had foreseen. Great story


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