AnElephantCant tell if this plane
Has wide enough seats to squeeze in his wee bum so
He sits on the wing
Has a swing and a sing
And – wait for it! – pretends he is Dumbo on a Jumbo
Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Piloted weekly by Captain Rochelle, who charts a course for amazing aviatory adventures from her air-raising acolytes.
And AnElephant remains earthbound.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.
Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Fear of Flying
She wakens in a state of absolute dread, certain of the disaster to come.
All the way to the airport she begs him not to go, to at least postpone his flight.
She has a premonition of death, and her sixth sense is powerful.
She weeps at Departures, knowing in her heart she will never see him again.
Two hours later she is still in the viewing area, watching as his plane disappears over the Alps.
As she returns to her car, the boy snatches her handbag, thrusting her into the concrete pillar.
She never comes out of the coma.
Wonderful twist. If only her sixth sense could have been slightly more directive.
Really good story – I have premonitions sometimes and almost all of mine have come to pass. This one is great and it is a twist to be her that would not see him again. Too bad – let the kid have the purse. Thanks, Nan
Great twist!
oh my goodness! what a tense piece this is…enjoyed it and the opening Dumbo on a Jumbo 😛
Ellespeth
Dear AEC,
And does the plane crash, too?
Good story and a sly twist on the usual.
Aloha,
Doug
Elephant, Just about everything’s been said. Good writing from the intro to the ending twist. 🙂 —Susan
Always love your limerick on the top !
…and this was a clever twist in the tale !
Maybe could be subtitled, fear of driving.
Wonder how he’ll deal with his guilt when he finds out that when he left this is what happened….
Dear Elephant,
Now that’s a good twist. One tiny nit: Did you mean “a boy” instead of “the boy”?
All my best,
Marie Gail
Oh my – Turns out it was her safety & not his.
Nice twist! (Ok – maybe not that nice – but – you know what I mean…) 🙂
That evil sixth sense steered her wrong. Delightful twist
Great twist. Didn’t see it coming. As usual love your intro!
Ah, the Old Switcheroo (not that it hasn’t been done before on this blog). Very good job, Elephant! Five wings.
Great job! Love the opening poem (of course).
Great twist!
Dear Elephant,
Well part of her premonition was correct. She’d never see him again. Quite a twist. (Dumbo on a Jumbo?…clever.)
Shalom,
Rochelle
Not the death she had foreseen. Great story