AnElephantCant distract you
Please don’t go and read this now
But when you get a chance
Please take a quick glance
At the hipporhinocerocow
But read this story first please
Then visit the other Fictioneers
Some will make you laugh
Some are just daft
And some will reduce you to tears
Yup, it is Friday Fictioneer time again.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.
Copyright EL Appleby
The Toy
Yes, Daddy, I do love new Mummy.
Yes, Daddy, that is the best toy I have ever had.
Thank you, new Mummy.
Ouch!
Sorry, thank you, Mummy.
No, Daddy, I don’t miss real – I mean old! – Mummy any more.
Yes, I know you – we! – are going to be happy now.
Good night, Daddy.
Good night, Mummy.
Yes, I am taking it up with me, I will cuddle it all night.
Well, until I pour that stuff over it anyway.
And leave it at your bedroom door.
I know what she did.
I want to see if witches really burn.
Oh wow, did not see that ending coming – such a powerful turnaround.
what a sinister twist! great story and good luck with emigration 🙂
Great piece! Poor kid…
good luck with the move!
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Oh, yes! Get her, girl!
Scott
Mine:
http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/06/05/friday-fictioneers-672013-invasion-seriously-pg13/
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This is so twisted. I liked it. Well done with the child’s tone throughout. It made it more chilling.
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Not easy to replace old mummy .. well told
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Terrifying, all the more because you keep the childish tone of voice all the way through. Good job of gradually showing us how bad the situation is, starting from that fourth-line “ouch” – we can guess what New Mummy did there, can’t we?
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A child’s heart breaking well told.
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Ooh, that’s chilling. Seriously intense. I love it.
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I think I may give this story for my kids to read — figure it applies to evil step-fathers, too?
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Wow. Just…. wow. Not what I expected at all. Very well done, proud pachyderm.
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Interesting how much she understands the world already and is ready to send her own message.
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I like your approach – whimsical with a dark edge. Old mummy would be pleased.
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Why is it I can hear the Wicked Witch cackling in the background? A nice little dark piece AEC!
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Very interesting. I just had to drop in and see what an elephant can’t would write about this prompt. I was not disappointed.
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Ooo such a dark ending, expressing well the hole created inside children by new mummies… thought provoking & quite disturbing!
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Ouch. I had one of them…thought she was a witch, but she turned out to be just misunderstood – as most of us are. Though we never did get along all that well…especially after she left…
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Oh my. Somebody is in some serious trouble here. Nice job. And I don’t blame him for wanting to get even.
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WHOA!!! Holy COW, Elephant! Magnificent! Even the opening poem was super!
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a different take i felt.. nice 🙂
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I hope the old Mummy is still around for her to run to when new Mummy goes up in smoke! Great tale.
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A budding Carrie here–diabolical story.
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Wow! Wouldn’t be in new Mummy’s shoes for all the tea in China. Really well done.
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A very chilling story – I feel for the child whose mother has been replaced, but I’m also a little nervous for New Mummy!
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That was quite the twist
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was feeling sorry for the poor obedient child until he outlined his plans. quite unique tale
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Interesting story “The Curse of New Mummy!” An elephant can, for sure!
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Love the POV!
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Oooh, a vengeful child is a scary thing. A very well crafted story!
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I think new Mummy won’t see this coming. This child is very crafty!
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Youth all fired up with burning ambition?
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I hope the attack of emigration isn’t life-threatening, and that you shake it off soon. The rhymes simply won’t be the same, in French.
Beware of the young child.. Ha! An interesting read. 🙂
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Don’t mess with a child’s heart
what an intriguing and dark turn to the prompt
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J’en frissonne… karma can be a b., sorry witch!
Tres bien fait encore une fois.
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Oh my….
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New mummy! Chilling. Which means I enjoyed it very much! 😀
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Say what? Well I will have to go over and see what that’s all about! 😀
Bringing in a new or additional parent to a relationship can be quite tricky. People aren’t always what/who they seem. Glad this kid is on alert!
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Very nicely done and quite original!
janet
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Kids are smart. I’m pleased to report my step-relative relationships have been far more positive!
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Well this is brilliant! I feel a smidgen of sadness (not really) for the “new” mommy. I think she’s about to be outclassed by her new step-daughter! You can’t trust anyone these days! Loved this! 🙂 xo
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I love this. The way, again, you use the characters that are already there and explain everything in what is said. It is sad for the poor kid.
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I understand. Good luck with everything.
Oh, wow. That got dark awfully fast! I’m not sure, but I think this kid is scary.
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Dear Elephant,
Many layers to your clever story-telling! Wonderful!
Shalom,
Rochelle
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ooh, it’s going to take quite a while in family therapy to work this through, I see, Randy.
Cut story
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That’s some classic stuff. Stepmothers are always evil, right?
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Great variation on the toy theme! The new Mummy is going to learn that you don’t buy children with toys.
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Good luck with the emigration!