Afterlife – Six Sentence Story

Copyright C. E. Ayr

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – SPACE

An Apology:
I have been very remiss in my (non-)replies to your kind comments over the past 2 weeks here.
This is because on my return to Scotland at the end of July I promptly contracted Covid which has left me short of energy and concentration.
I will try to do better.

Click here to hear the author read his words:


So this is heaven.

A nice lady shows us onto a bus and we get the grand tour, where we see parks and gardens, flowers and trees, rivers and streams, and, in the distance, snow-peaked mountains, all in oodles of space and very, very lovely, and basically pretty much as I expected when I volunteered.

You see, I am, or rather I was, a suicide bomber, and I joined the fight for my beliefs, as I was taught.

Paradise looks to be pretty much as promised even if I haven’t seen any virgins yet, although that is maybe a bit unfair, I can’t really judge the ladies here, can I?

When, at the end of the tour, we get separated and allocated different queues for our eventual destinations, it turns out that I am the only one in this queue, which has a signpost saying ‘Underworld’.

It seems that God is, after all, a Catholic, and suicide is a mortal sin.

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40 Responses to Afterlife – Six Sentence Story

  1. Nancy Richy says:

    Ha! Great post. Loved the ending!


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  3. Cute story, love what you did with the prompt 🙂


  4. clark says:

    Lol excellent punch line. (I’m still working on the humorous Sixes… there is an art to not telegraphing the punchline, a skill I have not mastered… and given the whole ‘Six-and-only-Six sentence rule, it’s no mean feat! well done)

    Hey, sorry to hear about the covid. But, look at the bright side, you now have a medical condition to account for the lack of taste.

    bar rum bump!! (no, he dihin’t!)
    (being a clark, I’ve enjoyed a certain advantage during the pandemic, having been born socially-distant)


    • ceayr says:

      I spent significant time writing 100-word stories on Friday Fictioneers, an interesting discipline where brevity is the soul of pretty much everything.
      I also write children’s books, poetry and songs, so I’ve developed a certain flexibility of approach over the years.
      I’m amazed and utterly impressed that you (very nearly) made a joke here.
      I hope you didn’t get a nose-bleed so far out of your comfort zone.

      Liked by 2 people

      • clark says:

        Dude! Been out of (my) comfort zone in the course of writing the Doctrine blog* over the years so many times, if I wasn’t already chronically anemic…lol
        In my defense, I can’t, for the life of me, tell a fricken ‘knock-knock’ joke to an audience of one.

        Compliments on the new look, the ‘kinder, gentler ceayr’ with the attentive follow-up on the comments.
        Remember: rocking chairs are not toys and shawls are not just for infants. Maybe, if you’re feeling especially rambunctious, you might commission the local tailor to do up a nice cardigan with an embroidered ‘I am blogger! Hear me snore!’

        *comfort zone leaving motto: “If I get everyone mad at me for writing this, I’ll just have to get myself another set of everyone”


  5. UP says:

    oh dear


  6. Liz H says:

    Always with the twist at the end, ye wiley one! You crack me up, royally.
    And here’s to being on the mend, Sir!


  7. Let us know what it’s like down there so we can decide if sinning is worth it or not!
    Hopefully, you are rid of covid now.


  8. ladysighs says:

    I was under the impression that the trip to Scotland was to replenish your soul. Sorry to read the bad news about Covid. 😦
    But the good news is you now know for sure you don’t have a soul. None of us do. 🙂

    I will find something to replenish, restore, refresh, renew your spirit, fire up, light up your energy. 😉


    • ceayr says:

      Thank you for your kind words, dear Lady.
      I use ‘soul’ to describe whatever it is inside us that makes us who we are, with no religious connotation.
      I appreciate, as always, your delightful song, which raised me once again to a higher plane!


  9. Reena Saxena says:

    Hope you are getting better. Your writing still carries the same power, and that is why writers can’t stop writing.


  10. Leyde Ryan says:

    I have been SO Worried about you!! Every other day I checked the Reader…because last I knew you were headed to Scotland for a cool breeze…and pretty soon my thoughts went negative. Oh my–has your “C” case been a mild one, or pretty tough?? Please know you’re in my heart and prayers everyday (for a full recovery). Leslie


    • ceayr says:

      No need to fret, Leslie, it takes more than a worldwide plague to dampen my spirits.
      I think it would have cleared in 2 or 3 days if I’d just rested, but I had a zillion things to do and exhausted myself several times, causing it to drag on.
      Thanks for caring.

      Liked by 1 person

      • Leyde Ryan says:

        Oh, bless your heart…I’m somewhat relieved. And I understand exactly, about needing to rest–but having a zillion things to do. Take care–I’ll keep you in my prayers.


  11. Well done! And please never apologize for not responding to a comment from me, i’m so busy from work it’s all i can do to read and leave a comment anyway.


  12. Six inspired by dreams inspired by covid? Naah…you haven’t missed a beat, ceayr!
    I hope you’re well on the mend and back to more normal energy levels.


  13. Reminds of the Far Side cartoon of a man in Hell facing two doors marked ‘Damned If You Do’ and ‘Damned If You Don’t’, with the Devil poking him in the back with a pitchfork saying ‘C’mon, c’mon, pick one or the other!’
    Hope you’re soon not lookin’ a bit peely-wally, Big Yin.


  14. Prior... says:

    Nice writing (with your usual flow)
    And hope you are 100% spon


  15. jenne49 says:

    Nicely set up as always and a gentle, light-hearted comment on the confusion of religions in the world. The matter-of-fact, mischievous tone gives it a special quality that made me smile.


  16. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice twist at the end. I was wondering if you were going to let him have a few virgins.


  17. Ha! I thought of Paul Simon’s The Afterlife with the queues and all.
    How interesting to know that God is Catholic. I’ll be damned.
    Feel better.

    Liked by 1 person

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