The Painting – Six Sentence Story

Copyright C E Ayr

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – CANVAS

Click here to hear the author read his words:

The Painting

Ooh, that looks like a new painting, says my femme du moment as we move towards our usual table in our favourite restaurant.

I stop dead, staring at the superb piece of artwork which depicts a narrow wooden pier running diagonally across the canvas.

Indeed, I say, signalling to the maître d’, I think I prefer to sit at the other window this evening.

Mais certainement, Monsieur Ayr, of course, we can always accommodate ze famous author!

Oh that’s a shame, says my companion, we can’t see the painting from here, just the boats and the sea and the sunset.

Hmm, I murmur absently, wondering how long the artist took to complete the work, and reminding myself to check tomorrow that, even at low tide, the weighted sack containing the body of my late wife is not visible.

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39 Responses to The Painting – Six Sentence Story

  1. Lindsey says:

    Another splendid twist. Think I’d be used to them by now but my sudden gasp suggested otherwise! Great stuff.


  2. Liz H says:

    The dastardly deed must remain undiscovered…he has a date on the morrow with another woman!


  3. Nice twist. Um, I wouldn’t order the crabs for a while.


  4. Deliciously macabre! The French flavourings are perfect.

    On a side note: when I first saw the photo of the pier, with that tall strut part at the shore edge, I thought of a guillotine… and I imagined someone being beheaded, their noggin landing with a soft plump on the sand to be later washed away. And I thought: must not prejudice CE’s story with my own dark thoughts, only to be suitably delighted by the author’s twist! Ha!


  5. Chris Hall says:

    Another ‘killer’ last line which definitely didn’t disappoint. Bravo, mon ami!


  6. emkingston says:

    *snickering under my breath* That was great! I love a good twist 🙂


  7. Zelda Winter says:

    Hahahahahaha–I LOVED the ending!!!!


  8. How low the tide gets should have been one of the first things he checked. Always have disposal nailed down tighter than a drum, it’s bodies turning up that has thrown a wrench into the works of many a perfect murder.


  9. clark says:

    Nice ‘sharp-angle close’ to your Six this week. (Totally misdirected with the apparent attitude of the protagonist toward the artist).


  10. ladysighs says:

    I’m wondering if they were dining at a seafood restaurant and he sniffed a whiff of wife?


  11. UP says:

    great six and the photo is perfect


  12. Your wickedness knows no bounds. Long may it continue.


  13. Pat Brockett says:

    It looks like I am not the only one not expecting that twist at the end. That was quite a hook!


  14. Frank Hubeny says:

    I didn’t expect the painting of the pier to get him worried about where he buried his wife. I thought he might have been the one to have painted it. Nice description: “my femme du moment”


  15. Run mama, run! (she says to la femme du moment)
    Don’t know why, but the film Secret Window came to mind.
    Hm…story within a story?


  16. jenne49 says:

    Mm, nice twist and an excellent ‘rank badjin’.
    Deliciously detached wickedness.
    Favourite line? ‘I stop dead…’


  17. Katrin McElderry says:

    Whoa! Wasn’t expecting that! What a twist.


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