The Boat – Six Sentence Story

Copyright C. E. Ayr

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – GEAR

Click here to hear the author read his words:

The Boat

High on the cliff face, lying in the long grass, I pay little attention at first to the boat slipping into the secluded inlet, although I do notice that it is of exceptional quality.
It is not huge by the standards of this coast but, unusually, it looks as though it is designed for speed rather than comfort or capacity.
Two men are on deck, carefully studying the sides of the calanque, but as I am almost invisible in my bird-watching gear, their eyes sweep past my location.
A third man appears and because, even from this distance, he looks vaguely familiar, I raise my binoculars to confirm his identity.
All three immediately turn their heads towards my position, leading me to assume that the sun has reflected off a lens.
As I adjust the focus, I see two rifles pointing straight at me.

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23 Responses to The Boat – Six Sentence Story

  1. Sharp Six! Like how it builds from the perceived safety of the ‘bird watcher’ blending into the landscape and observing – then is undone by the reflection of the binoculars.


  2. emmylgant says:

    Vintage C.E..
    Well done.


  3. clark says:

    heck with your contract killers and their 500SL… assassins on 12 Meter sailboat! (advantage of surprise).
    Don’t you love how some stories whisper (“A little more! Write them another chapter….”
    Good Six


  4. Sounds like it’s payback time. It had to happen eventually!


  5. Well paced. Love how you snuck up on us with the dramatic ending!
    I’m becoming a big fan of the “spoken” Six 🙂


  6. Dear me! That’s a cliff hanger …


  7. jenne49 says:

    What a calm build-up of observations and tension that also gives us the character of the narrator.
    It’s great.


  8. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like the build up of tension with “All three immediately turn their heads towards my position”.


  9. Well evoked and clever ending.


  10. Chris Hall says:

    Ooh, that ending made me sit up! Excellent Six.


  11. UP says:

    cool picture, good post, good use of the six


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