This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – GEAR
Click here to hear the author read his words:
The Boat
High on the cliff face, lying in the long grass, I pay little attention at first to the boat slipping into the secluded inlet, although I do notice that it is of exceptional quality.
It is not huge by the standards of this coast but, unusually, it looks as though it is designed for speed rather than comfort or capacity.
Two men are on deck, carefully studying the sides of the calanque, but as I am almost invisible in my bird-watching gear, their eyes sweep past my location.
A third man appears and because, even from this distance, he looks vaguely familiar, I raise my binoculars to confirm his identity.
All three immediately turn their heads towards my position, leading me to assume that the sun has reflected off a lens.
As I adjust the focus, I see two rifles pointing straight at me.
Scary! Well done!
Sharp Six! Like how it builds from the perceived safety of the ‘bird watcher’ blending into the landscape and observing – then is undone by the reflection of the binoculars.
Glad you enjoyed, sir
Vintage C.E..
Well done.
Lovely to see you here, Em.
Thank you
heck with your contract killers and their 500SL… assassins on 12 Meter sailboat! (advantage of surprise).
Don’t you love how some stories whisper (“A little more! Write them another chapter….”
Good Six
And sometimes I do, Clark.
We’ll see…
Sounds like it’s payback time. It had to happen eventually!
Nae worries, Keith, I can duck!
Well paced. Love how you snuck up on us with the dramatic ending!
I’m becoming a big fan of the “spoken” Six 🙂
Laughing.
I do like a wee sneak up!
Happy you enjoy the reading.
Dear me! That’s a cliff hanger …
Ba-boom, tsh!
What a calm build-up of observations and tension that also gives us the character of the narrator.
It’s great.
Thanks, Jenne
I like the build up of tension with “All three immediately turn their heads towards my position”.
Cheers, Frank
Well evoked and clever ending.
Thanks, Doug
Ooh, that ending made me sit up! Excellent Six.
Sitting up is good!
Thanks, Chris
cool picture, good post, good use of the six
Thank you, sir!