Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by Jean L. Hays.
© Jean L. Hays
Click here to hear the author read his words:
Delivery Man
Who is it?
The words crackle from the speaker.
I pause, carefully put down the parcel.
This is my first day in my new job, and my first delivery.
It is probably my last chance to make something of my life.
I have made so many mistakes in the past, and I know she is running out of patience.
She loves me, and I can’t imagine life without her.
I need to get it right this time.
For her sake.
I take a deep breath.
Delivery, I lie, needs a signature.
And, for the umpteenth time, I check my weapon.
Sound Bite Fiction 
Your creative writing spells the character out. I luv the mental twist.💧🐋
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Thank you, I hope you read the sequel:
https://ceayr.com/2020/07/22/delivery-man-2-the-sequel/
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Luv 2!🐋💦
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I feel that I’m there beside him, and sadly that he’s doomed, great twist at the end.
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Thank you, your comment made me smile.
Maybe you can talk to him?
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My heart goes out to him. He’s doing this for her sake. I guess he believe that it’s worth it and it’s either this or a future without her.
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He is in love, what else needs to be said? He’ll do anything for her.
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Well, gotta admit, the guy was persistent. Great turn at the end, CE.!
Five out of five weapon magazines.
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The things we do for love, Kent!
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😀
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What an ominous ending. Leaves the reader seeking more. Good story CE!
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Thank you, GiN, glad you enjoyed.
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Oy! His ‘choice settings’ is set to “WRONG!”
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Nice piece, Ceayr!
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Well yeah, but…
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😉
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Incredible build up with a great twist! You have me rooting for a hitman.
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Thanks, Brenda, but I have to say I’m surprised at you!
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Haha…your fault not mine!
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He sounds like kind of a loser who’s doing his best. I like him!
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Y’know, Alicia, I kinda like him myself.
Maybe he’ll be back.
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I have so many questions! Who is this guy? Who’s the guy he’s about to kill? Why? I want to know more!
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My dear Bernadette,
I only have 100 words, so that is it!
Maybe next week…
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Oh dear – no woman is worth a jail sentence.
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Laughing.
Well, Liz, I’m not sure that is true…
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It’s so hard to please a woman these days, isn’t it? 🙂
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I couldn’t say, JJ, I gave up trying many years ago!
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I think the secret is to just ask them. Most men don’t do that. Sigh!
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Maybe because too often the answer is ‘Well, if you don’t know…’
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I fear this chap is doomed to a lifetime of mistakes…
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C’mon, Ali, at least he is trying!
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Sounds like another mistake coming up.
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Oh ye of little faith!
He’s doing his best here
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I love that last line. I am afraid though that this might just be one mistake too many.
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Nah, this time he’ll get it right.
Maybe.
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Awesome twist ending!
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Hello, Paula, always a pleasure to greet a new reader.
Glad you enjoyed my wee tale.
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I was a while reading this due to laughter. Then I listened to it. I want this guy to be real. A full length book? Good one. I enjoyed it.
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Thanks, Bill, he is a recurring theme in my stories.
Your support is much appreciated
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I wasn’t expecting that! Great take on the photo prompt.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thanks, Susan
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I’m sure she’ll be very proud of him, who wouldn’t?
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As long as he puts haggis on the table, she’ll be happy!
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And he will deliver!
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Stamped and sealed!
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Why am I rooting for a guy who is clearly planning bloody murder? Really good, CE.
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Perhaps because we love people because of their faults, not in spite of them?
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Good point. I think you’re right.
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Oh no. Hope she is okay & pray that the ending is fine.
Why weapon?
The best weapons are smiles and love.
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Smiles and love are rarely the weapons of choice for a hitman, Anita!
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Ooh great twist. I feel bad that I root for him. 😀
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Laughing. Nah, he’s an okay guy, as hitmen go!
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I wonder what he wrote on his resume that he landed with such an incredible job 🙂
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Maybe, like the rest of us, he writes fiction…
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I bet 🙂
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Dear CE,
Yes, it could very well be his last day on the job.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Or the start of a bright new future, m’lady?
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Ace.
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Cool comment
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I was almost beginning to warm to him. And in a way, I’m still a bit tepid. I like a murderer who is at least trying to please somebody, if not his victim.
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Don’t you agree that most of us are not all good or bad, but a mix?
Maybe even you, Sandra, are not always as patient and sweet-tempered as you might like, hmm?
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The thing I like about your stories is the baddies are all (mostly) good people
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And the goodies are (mostly) flawed, I think.
A bit like life.
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Just from the title I knew this was going to be a special kind of delivery man.
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There are always clues, Iain!
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Ooh. Good work!
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Laughing.
Thanks, Trish!
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