Delivery Man – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by
Jean L. Hays.

© Jean L. Hays


Click here to hear the author read his words:

Delivery Man

Who is it?
The words crackle from the speaker.
I pause, carefully put down the parcel.
This is my first day in my new job, and my first delivery.
It is probably my last chance to make something of my life.
I have made so many mistakes in the past, and I know she is running out of patience.
She loves me, and I can’t imagine life without her.
I need to get it right this time.
For her sake.
I take a deep breath.
Delivery, I lie, needs a signature.
And, for the umpteenth time, I check my weapon.

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66 Responses to Delivery Man – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Your creative writing spells the character out. I luv the mental twist.💧🐋

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  2. I feel that I’m there beside him, and sadly that he’s doomed, great twist at the end.

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  3. notestowomen says:

    My heart goes out to him. He’s doing this for her sake. I guess he believe that it’s worth it and it’s either this or a future without her.

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  4. wmqcolby says:

    Well, gotta admit, the guy was persistent. Great turn at the end, CE.!
    Five out of five weapon magazines.

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  5. What an ominous ending. Leaves the reader seeking more. Good story CE!

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  6. Oy! His ‘choice settings’ is set to “WRONG!”
    😉
    Nice piece, Ceayr!

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  7. Incredible build up with a great twist! You have me rooting for a hitman.

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  8. He sounds like kind of a loser who’s doing his best. I like him!

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  9. I have so many questions! Who is this guy? Who’s the guy he’s about to kill? Why? I want to know more!

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  10. Liz Young says:

    Oh dear – no woman is worth a jail sentence.

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  11. It’s so hard to please a woman these days, isn’t it? 🙂

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  12. draliman says:

    I fear this chap is doomed to a lifetime of mistakes…

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  13. Danny James says:

    Sounds like another mistake coming up.

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  14. Gabriella says:

    I love that last line. I am afraid though that this might just be one mistake too many.

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  15. Bill says:

    I was a while reading this due to laughter. Then I listened to it. I want this guy to be real. A full length book? Good one. I enjoyed it.

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  16. I wasn’t expecting that! Great take on the photo prompt.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  17. I’m sure she’ll be very proud of him, who wouldn’t?

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  18. And he will deliver!

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  19. granonine says:

    Why am I rooting for a guy who is clearly planning bloody murder? Really good, CE.

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  20. Anita says:

    Oh no. Hope she is okay & pray that the ending is fine.
    Why weapon?
    The best weapons are smiles and love.

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  21. Tannille says:

    Ooh great twist. I feel bad that I root for him. 😀

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  22. I wonder what he wrote on his resume that he landed with such an incredible job 🙂

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  23. Dear CE,

    Yes, it could very well be his last day on the job.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  24. MrBinks says:

    Ace.

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  25. Sandra says:

    I was almost beginning to warm to him. And in a way, I’m still a bit tepid. I like a murderer who is at least trying to please somebody, if not his victim.

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    • ceayr says:

      Don’t you agree that most of us are not all good or bad, but a mix?
      Maybe even you, Sandra, are not always as patient and sweet-tempered as you might like, hmm?

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  26. neilmacdon says:

    The thing I like about your stories is the baddies are all (mostly) good people

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  27. Iain Kelly says:

    Just from the title I knew this was going to be a special kind of delivery man.

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  28. trishsplace says:

    Ooh. Good work!

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