Down In One – Sunday Photo Fiction

Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in his picture (below).
Once again Al recycles a brilliant photo from a couple of years back, so I recycle my story from that time, but with a caveat.
It significantly exceeds the word limit, so I understand if you choose to skip past it.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and see what others have written.

© Al Forbes

Click here to hear the author read the tale:

Down in One

One of us has to die.
This is the conclusion we have reached.
For many reasons.
Her religious beliefs forbid divorce.
And financially that would not help our dire situation.
All of the faults in our marriage are mine.
Even I acknowledge that.
I am an awful husband.
An absent father.
She is a wonderful wife.
A perfect mother.
I am an habitual liar and a cheat.
She has never done a dishonest deed or said an unkind word in her life.
We stare at the vial of poison on the table between us.
She pours two glasses of wine.
It is a nice Côtes de Provence, but nothing too special.
It has to be me, I lie.
I have no intention of dying.
I know, she says sadly, with a half shake of her head.
She lifts the little bottle, pours its contents into her glass.
Half smiles.
I am in awe of this woman.
She is giving her life in the forlorn hope that I will take care of our children.
She raises her glass.
I lift mine in a salute.
Down in one, I ask.
I think so, she says, no time for second thoughts.
We look into each other’s eyes for the last time.
I love you, she says.
I feel an unfamiliar pang.
Conscience, perhaps?
We both drink deeply.
Her eyes grow moist.
She indicates the phial.
Water, she says.
The poison was already in your glass.

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27 Responses to Down In One – Sunday Photo Fiction

  1. Pingback: Sunday Photo Fiction – April 29 2018 – Sunday Photo Fiction

  2. Corine Gouy says:

    Oui Monsieur, quand on joue , c’est pour gagner!
    N’est ce pas?


  3. And BAM! Excellent!


  4. Corine Gouy says:

    Si un jour , j’ai quelqu’un a tuer , je ferai appel à ton imagination démoniaque


  5. Mike says:

    This was one smart lady.


  6. Somehow I knew lady..


  7. athling2001 says:

    Smart woman! Somehow I knew she was going to do that. Well done.


  8. Excellent. I loved this ☺


  9. willow88switches says:

    I remember the image and your story – and I still find it as amazing now, as it was then, including the slightly longer length. Adds the new dimension and twist.

    And yes, always a sign of a great pen and mind, when the original was and is as still well-written and relevant after the passage of time. I doff my chapeau.


  10. Thank goodness my religion allows divorce, or I could have taken the same route! Excellent.

    Welcome to Keith’s Ramblings!


  11. Joy Pixley says:

    Whew, when she does her first dishonest deed, she starts with a big one! Although it sounds like she made the right choice.


  12. 😈 taht’s what it was supposed to be


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