Real – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’
s photo by © Douglas M. MacIlroy confused me somewhat, though, in honesty, that is not a difficult task.
Anyway, as usual, I thought of love and happiness and produced this sweet tale.

The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Douglas M. MacIlroy


Click here to hear the writer read his words:

 

Real

She is real!
I have seen her so often in my dreams, but I’m awake now.
She is exactly as I imagined her.
She has long, flowing blonde hair, a suntanned sylph-like figure, and the slim, shapely legs of a dancer.
Her body sways gently, gracefully as if to some internal tune.
Her eyes are wide and blue, her look one of mild surprise.
She might be even more beautiful than the image in my mind.
So why am I heart-broken?
I am wearing a scuba outfit.
And her feet are chained to a rock ten metres below the sea.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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60 Responses to Real – Friday Fictioneers

  1. athling2001 says:

    Sick that somebody would have done that to her, but sad also. Too bad he didn’t meet her before this. Well done.

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  2. Sarah Ann says:

    Beautifully set up to the devastating reveal. I am left wondering who put her there.

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  3. Enjoyed the beauty of your corpse… alas a corpse is always a corpse.

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  4. Last lines are the blooming words. Love from India. ❤️

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  5. Hardly a sweet tale.. But well crafted! The final image was like a mermaid trapped at the bottom of the ocean. Must be something to fall in love with the dead…

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  6. Interesting way to get rid of a body. The fishes will eat it up!

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  7. Spreading sweetness and light as usual, I see 🙂

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  8. Wonderful unexpected ending. Not such a sweet tale after all.

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  9. lisarey1990 says:

    Great twist. Loved it.

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  10. So much for a budding romance.

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  11. I knew, absolutely, that when you mentioned a sweet tale, things would definitely end badly. You didn’t disappoint.

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  12. Liz Young says:

    That was a gut-wrenching ending

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  13. pennygadd51 says:

    What a dark story. If you believe in second sight, it’s not unreasonable that he should have dreamed repeatedly of the dead woman. If you don’t – what a sinister person your narrator becomes…

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  14. Sandra says:

    Lovely description there. I knew, of course, that it would end badly, but it was nice to enjoy the ride and relish the sights before it did.

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  15. subroto says:

    They should really stop meeting this way 😉

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  16. Nice watery twist.
    Randy

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  17. He’s back…..!
    It sounds like he arrived a little too late.

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  18. granonine says:

    Oh good grief. I think I’m mad at you. All that lovely idyll, and then death. Shame 🙂

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  19. Iain Kelly says:

    You could have just made her a mermaid in the last line…

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  20. Lynn Love says:

    Oh, you rotten devil! All that gorgeous description and then that last line – love at first sight dead in the water. Literally. Ah, you’re a terrible tease, C 🙂

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  21. Dear C.E.

    Imaginative take on an admittedly confusing prompt. I didn’t know what that thing was until I got to know himself, Mr. MacIlroy.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  22. James says:

    That’s certainly disappointed. Guess some dreams are not meant to be.

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  23. AshleyDannie says:

    Very chilling! Listening to you read it created such a heightened effect when you got to the conclusion! Well done!

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  24. A modern day Andromeda? Really loved this!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  25. jillyfunnell says:

    I love the way you end the story. Relationship would be harmonious but a little one-sided!

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  26. Loved the last turn of phrase employed. The wait proved worthy.

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  27. neilmacdon says:

    That would be an obstacle to the relationship. Yup.

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