Genocide – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s sunny panorama
by Jan Wayne Fields took me to my usual dark place.
Or did it?
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Jan Wayne Fields


Click here to hear the writer read his words:

 


Genocide

The bullet crashes into my chest.
I reel backwards, collapse.
I know it has smashed through my ribs, and that my blood is pumping out.
I hear the war cries of the attackers and the women screaming as our men die.
I know all is lost.
Our homes, our values, our way of life, gone forever.
A quiet descends.
I worry about my wife, wonder if she escaped to the hills.
Then I hear her voice.
She is standing over me, holding out her hand.
She smiles, helps me to my feet.
I am surprised that I feel no pain.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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56 Responses to Genocide – Friday Fictioneers

  1. That was beautiful.

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  2. MythRider says:

    True love prevails.

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  3. excellent story-telling as other have already noted. Well paced and sensitively handled. The sadness and tragedy fill every word

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  4. This was really well written. I love how you reveal his wife’s death with thoughts about his own lack of pain. And wonderful that they crossed over together.

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  5. I enjoyed your story, it was very well-written. So much loss. At least he crossed over with his wife by his side.

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  6. Happily they’re together in peace after a traumatic and violent end

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  7. James McEwan says:

    Reminded me of the wild west cowboy films. A sad but fitting ending.

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  8. Nan Falkner says:

    Very touching story – and enjoyable – Thanks for the entertainment! Nan

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  9. lisarey1990 says:

    Sad but wonderful ending. All the parts of the story are gorgeously crafted.

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  10. athling2001 says:

    Sad, sad, story, but I am glad they are united in the end.

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  11. A terrifying story… Crazy Horse saying:
    It’s a good day to day…
    comes to mind

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  12. Indira says:

    Sad story but the end is beautiful. Moving.

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  13. So many thoughts are racing through my mind right now I will only fill this little box with one. Very nicely done. OK, two thoughts. Thanks for the happy ending.

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  14. AshleyDannie says:

    Oh wow! This is great! I really like the ending! Sad, but at least they are back together!
    -AshleyDannie-

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  15. Mandie Hines says:

    Great ending. My cynical mind half expected him to learn he’d just been shot by his wife. I’m not sure how you managed to pull a happy ending out of them dying, but you did. Well done.

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  16. plaridel says:

    i love the ending which i can picture in my mind. well done.

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  17. Loved this story – loved that they were reunited and no longer in pain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  18. draliman says:

    I hope after all that they can find peace together in the ever-after.

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  19. Norma says:

    Finally there is some peace for him and his wife.
    What a harsh reality – war is, along with its petty siblings like genocide and mass massacre.
    Painful yet told beautifully, Ceayr.

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  20. jillyfunnell says:

    Beautiful ending – vividly written piece.

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  21. Fantastic tale with a stunning ending. Loved it.

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  22. You hit hard with that first line and took us from violence to peace – I hope it is truly like that when we go and nice to go together even if you don’t know it at the time.

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  23. Wow! Poetic and spiritual!

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  24. Corine Gouy says:

    C’est pour l’éternité maintenant , j’espère qu’il aimait sa femme sinon cela va être l’enfer !

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  25. Mike says:

    A world without bloodshed would be paradise.

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  26. Kwadwo says:

    Love does heal all wounds. I expect he will make a speedy recovery with her by his side.

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  27. Poor gal. Whatever happened to “until death do us part.” Now she has to take care of you for eternity? What a bummer.

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  28. Lynn Love says:

    I can think of much worse things to imagine as you die than your loved one. Beautifully done, C

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  29. pennygadd51 says:

    It was, of course, the wife who was up and about first, helping her husband to adjust to life in the afterlife…

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  30. granonine says:

    A beautiful ending. Our minds were on the same lake today, different boats 🙂

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  31. neilmacdon says:

    I can only hope death is really like that

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  32. Rowena says:

    Quite an apt story for today. It’s ANZAC Day here in Australia where we honour particularly our fallen service people but also those who made it through.
    It had a beautiful ambiance to the story.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    • ceayr says:

      I remember being deeply moved by the Australian War Memorial in Canberra, and seeing my quite unusual family name among the fallen.
      Thank you, Rowena.

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  33. Bittersweet tale, C.E.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  34. Iain Kelly says:

    A vivid description, perhaps they are better off moving on to a place without the pain.

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  35. Anita says:

    Glad they got united again.
    Hope they live happily ever after in a peaceful land that’s far from war and hatred and merciless killing and pain…
    Lovely story.

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  36. James says:

    Oh, they are in a different place to be sure.

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