The Prison – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
I found today’s gleaming photo by Amy Reese somewhat foreboding.
So my mind went, not unusually, to a strange dark place.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture, below.

© Amy Reese

© Amy Reese

Click here to hear me read my story:

The Prison

Urgent, come quickly.
I arrive within the hour.
It is a frightening place, remote and intimidating.
The chief guard hustles me to the governor’s office.
I glimpse long, empty corridors, shuttered cells on each side.
This is the most secure and the most brutal prison in the country.
It houses only the most dangerous inmates, men who kill without compunction.
We have an escapee, I am told.
But why call a private investigator, I ask, why not the official agencies.
No one can ever know, says the governor.
Names don’t matter here, only the numbers.
Welcome to your new home.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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69 Responses to The Prison – Friday Fictioneers

  1. prisonlovers says:

    This happens all the time. Where is justice? Just saying…

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  2. I knew there was something evil about you! Hope you’ll be out before the end of the Trump Administration.

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  3. gahlearner says:

    Oh no, how mean! And they let the horrible killer run free… Scary twist, you don’t disappoint.

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  4. Ha! Great surprise ending!

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  5. Michael Wynn says:

    Ouch, so he’s to take the place of the escapee. Was he chosen at random? because he won’t be missed? Loads of questions raised and a chilling scenario to ponder over.

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  6. Amy Reese says:

    What a twist, CE! Quite a punch at the end. No names here, and not any more with this guy. Well done.

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  7. “Surprise!”
    Loved it. You do have a way!

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  8. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    I like that you left me to fill in the blanks. I fell sorry for him, not at all convinced he deserved to be imprisoned with all those killers.

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  9. Iain Kelly says:

    And he was never heard from again… Great concept from the prompt.

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  10. Ashley Danielle says:

    Oh, I had a bad feeling and it was confirmed at the end! Wow, the chills!

    AshleyDannie

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  11. That can’t be good. It seems he’s made someone high up really angry. Dark but good writing, as usual, C.E. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  12. rgayer55 says:

    Well, someone has the fill the escapee’s slot. Problem solved.

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  13. hafong says:

    I felt the urgency!

    Lily

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  14. Clang! He must have done something awful. Even though, I knew there would be a killer last line, I was taken in until the end!

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  15. Oh my, not the luckiest day in his life.

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  16. Ooh, chilling. No arrest, no jury, no sentencing. If he’s just a number he’s never going to get out is he. I like it.

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  17. draliman says:

    Sounds like one job he shouldn’t have taken. Creepy stuff!

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  18. Oops! I fear he has walked into a trap.

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  19. mandibelle16 says:

    This sounds like he got himself to an awful situation, filing the body count at a terrible prison. I’m worried he’ll be killed or much worse, by his inmates. And I wonder if he as a ‘private investigator’ was chosen to be in this prison to snitch? I don’t think his inmates will like that if they find out.
    Great piece CE. Hugs as always.

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  20. Gruesome….just numbers!

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  21. jademwong says:

    Oh dear! Great twist 🙂

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  22. Morgan says:

    oooh nice twist! Poor unsuspecting dude lol 😉

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  23. elmowrites says:

    Oooh, ouch. I like the line “name don’t matter here, only numbers”, and how you lead us in before socking it to us. One of your best!

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  24. Indira says:

    New home indeed. Excellent story. I like your style very much.

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  25. Lynn Love says:

    I just want to know what he’s done. Was it something to do with his PI work? And why the hell did the fool go in there when he must have been aware he was a possible inmate? A dark tale, nicely spun as always, C. Hope you’re taking care 🙂

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  26. A PI less maybe, or there might be way out by being snitch I guess…

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  27. Graham Lawrence says:

    Spooky. I can hear the bolts sliding and the keys turning.

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  28. wmqcolby says:

    You know, I hope i never commit a crime worthy of THAT place.

    Awesome, C.E., as usual.

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  29. Oh no! Is he stuck there now too?

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  30. michael1148humphris says:

    Looks like he is joining Mr Bond

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  31. neilmacdon says:

    I heard the door clang shut

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  32. Dear CE,

    This doesn’t bode well for the PI. Chilling.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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