The Rocks – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
And, this week, she also provides the inspiration photo.
Which makes me think of happy days on the coast of paradise.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture, below.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The Rocks

I am feeling a bit down.
Not just because of the weather.
On a rocky jetty outside of town, my boot skids.
I fall awkwardly.
My leg is broken.
I pass out with pain.
I waken, soaked, as much by the incoming tide as by the steady rain.
My phone slips from my numb fingers, disappears with the next wave.
I try to crawl to safety, but the weight of my sodden coat is a hindrance.
I am a writer, inspired by the sea.
As my beloved Mediterranean washes over me, one thought concerns me.
Who will write this story?

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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66 Responses to The Rocks – Friday Fictioneers

  1. What a helpless and hopeless situation. Everything happened to him that would assure his demise. I’m sure he’s thinking that would be a great way to kill off a character. The only thing that can save him would be a hiker who happens by. That wouldn’t work unless there was some kind of foreshadowing. Well written, C.E. —-Suzanne

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  2. I found myself nodding my head at that last line, as if I understood.

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  3. Wonderful story telling, CE; I’m hoping it’s not autobiographical! I love the tension you build with each wave, and the final line clinches it! I’m also amused that the photo reminds you of happy times in paradise, but this is what you wrote! 😉

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  4. wmqcolby says:

    One of those “who’s minding the store?” comments on the last line. Classic.

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  5. Margaret says:

    Gosh! Some days nothing goes right. Poor fella. I like the post-modern twist you’ve got here CE. Very good.

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  6. Loved the black humour. Most enjoyable.

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  7. ansumani says:

    CEAYR just did 🙂 Nicely done.

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  8. What a fantastic story, and how terrifying that last line is!

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  9. samra says:

    The last line sealed the deal. Indeed a scary thought.

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  10. The Voice says:

    I suppose if we are philosophical about it, the author is writing every word of his story with his life. The real question is, who will remember it? Now that I think of it, are we, as writers trying to capture a piece of immortality with our writing?

    Ok, I think I’ve had too much wine. Love the story, C.E.

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  11. liz young says:

    Splendidly drawn series of believable disasters. Perhaps the Med will buoy him up and let him swim to safety?

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  12. mjlstories says:

    So I’m wondering, who did write it?
    Funny and poignant at the same time.

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  13. jellico84 says:

    Who, indeed? Love this!

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  14. Dahlia says:

    Awesome – indeed the only horrifying thought for a true writer 🙂

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  15. Ohhhh, what an imagination!

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  16. mandibelle16 says:

    Extremely unfortunate and not a good way to go out in life. And your question is excellent. If nobody can find him down by the rocks and the ocean, how will they know what happened to him. How will they know his story? But I suppose we are never able to write the endings to our ‘own’ stories.

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  17. That’s why the Japanese samurais wrote a jisei, a death poem before going to war… maybe an author has to do the same… (but I guess it would kill you just to imagine all the different ways you might die)

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  18. mickwynn2013 says:

    Oh dear, his final story. great last line as already mentioned

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  19. paulmclem says:

    Lol….get your priorities right…oh, you did 🙂

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  20. Well done.. love the story and the last line are great! 🙂

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  21. Lynn Love says:

    Great story, but so sad, I long for someone to walk past and rescue him! Tragic, the thought of someone lying there, waiting for the sea to claim them. Well written, gorgeously constructed – a great write

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    • ceayr says:

      Shucks Lynn, so many compliments.
      And don’t fret, I wrote another line where a mermaid appears, saves him, marries him, raises a family with him, then eats him with French fries.
      But that took me up to 102 words, so please don’t tell Madame R.

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      • Lynn Love says:

        Haha! Poor man. Though at least if he’s eaten by a mermaid, his death will have some purpose.:) Mermaids, the Black Widows of the Ocean. Definitely as tale in that idea …

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        • ceayr says:

          Aha, dear Lynn, you will find that I already write of mermaids and their ilk in some of my internationally renowned works available at very reasonable rates from the right hand panel of this very page. The Second Request e-book is set at Amazon’s lowest price point. Or you can just go to Current Story, above, and hear something for free.

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  22. michael1148humphris says:

    You remind me of Marjorie who fell into the water wearing a full size fur coat, it took three people to pull her free from the waters grip. And that was without a broken leg. Love those last two lines.

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  23. Fabulous last line. Typical writer!

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  24. I really loved this story.
    poor fellow.

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  25. misskzebra says:

    “I am feeling a bit down,”

    That line cracks me up a bit.

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  26. Dale says:

    Reflective piece, written in an almost nonchalant voice. Who will, indeed?

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  27. Dear CE,

    He is in quite a pickle. Perhaps an elephant will write in his place. 😉 I agree with Neil–killer last line. Well constructed story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  28. neilmacdon says:

    Who will write this story? – a killer last line

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