The Mall – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant say he enjoys shopping
This is not too hard for him to admit
He can never buy shoes
Or pants that are loose
And it is impossible to find a hat that will fit

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Our inspirational guide Rochelle encourages quality chronicles from talented tale-tellers.
And AnElephant.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

© Kent Bonham

© Kent Bonham

The Mall

I work security here.
This is The Mall, a cathedral to consumer greed.
During the few hours each night when it is closed, I patrol inside.
There are only six of us, and we are unpaid.
We do it for love.
Because this place is the lifeblood of the district.
People flock from distant parts to spend here.
Or, at night, to steal.
The Security Manager turns a blind eye to us.
We are very unofficial.
But we do benefit from a unique bonus system.
We give him the stolen goods from whatever thieves we catch.
And we keep them.

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61 Responses to The Mall – Friday Fictioneers

  1. i b arora says:

    well that was interesting


  2. gahlearner says:

    Eek, there’s a side of the elephant I wasn’t aware of. Great build-up of seemingly harmless reflectionon human consumerism only to be followed by some, err, different consumerism.


  3. storydivamg says:

    My dear AnElephant, what a creepy little tale you’ve served up for us this week.



  4. Oof. I’ll stay away from that mall after hours. Lovely piece of horror.


  5. Danny James says:

    I think they work at a mall here too!



  6. Jan Brown says:

    Nicely done. “Lifeblood of the district”…very clever!

    I would not want to be caught by your crew!


  7. Margaret says:

    Your security guards sound very effective – and very scary, vampires or not. Gripping story. Great ending.


  8. Francesca Smith says:

    That just went to a very dark place.
    So, obviously, I enjoyed it!


  9. Yolanda Renee says:

    Turn about is fair play. Well done!


  10. phylor says:

    You have convinced me NOT to take up a life of crime stealing from any cathedrals to greed! Thanks for the warning! The last line is a “killer.”


  11. Ah.. yes there is always some way to benefit.. greed is ever present.


  12. Now that’s a volunteer job with great fringe benefits!


  13. What an enterprising lot! Did they steal any garlic?
    Rosey Pinkerton’s blog


  14. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Elephant, So Management turns a blind eye to the declining thief population – well that works for me too! And the added bonus is they get their merchandise back! Great tale! Nan


  15. Not vampires but seemingly with an equal taste for blood.


  16. Dale says:

    I guess it is win-win. Well, except for the thieves, of course!


  17. so much for the 3 strikes you are out rule! I guess I better stay away from the mall at night


  18. Lynda says:

    Killer last line; I like it!


  19. emmylgant says:

    Like cats with a mouse.
    ‘We do it for love’… brrr.
    A little torture before they bleed to death?
    Chilling last line.


  20. bykimberlylynne says:

    So ordinary an start, so extraordinary a twist at the end. AnElephant has given me shivers yet again, and here I am without my settee. Tip of my ill-fitting hat to you.


  21. Caerlynn Nash says:

    A little something for everyone! Well done!


  22. ansumani says:

    Looks like a win-win situation to the security managers of the mall. Great twist at the end there!


  23. Dave says:

    I always suspected Mall Cops weren’t upstanding citizens.


  24. Vinay Leo R. says:

    Poor thieves… if only they knew. If only…


  25. micklively says:

    It’s an ill wind that blows bad for everyone.
    good piece.


  26. Sandra says:

    Ah! Vampires! But so discreetly executed. Did I spell that correctly, I wonder? And cathedrals of consumer greed is such a wonderful description.


  27. Dear Elephant

    Cathedrals of consumer greed. I like that. Dare I guess that these “security guards” of the night are vampires?




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