A Day in the Death – Six Sentence Story

Artwork by Phil Burns

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – FLUID

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A Day in the Death

This is one of those days, one of those murky, muggy days, when everything’s a bit, what’s the word, fluid maybe, like nothing’s too solid, there’s nothing to get a hold of, and I seem to exist in a haze, in a swirl of mist, or fog, or even, if I was on the other coast, a haar.

Although my memory is not what it was, I can still remember some things, just not the boring stuff like who I am, where I’m from, and why I’m here.

But I find that, as time passes, all those personal details become increasingly irrelevant, quite meaningless.

I do, I’m pretty sure, remember the important moments of my life, like that cold, dreich evening when everything changed, I did bad things, and that particular life ended.

I think, for example, that I remember why I killed her, and then myself.

Except, of course, that I didn’t actually top myself, did I, because that would have been dumb, and kind of final, so I just pretended that bit.

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29 Responses to A Day in the Death – Six Sentence Story

  1. Very cool. The character is indeed very fluid, having me think first just confused, then it’s a ghost, then maybe still alive but with some dark secrets and no matter it’s all very spooky.

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  2. Liz H says:

    Phantom fools himself.
    Spectacular, spooky six!

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  3. Tom says:

    It reads to me like the swirling thoughts of an ethereal phantom, CE, who maybe trying to turn the reality into pretence! Quite a ghost story!

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  4. Great mysterious 6, Ceayr. It seems he is having inner turmoil. Murder/suicide feeling on this one.

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  5. He leaves us in a fluid state also, about his ultimate fate.

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  6. clark says:

    liking the new (for me) wordage… (to devolve into the metaphor of an a certain Cafe & Bistro that shall remain unnamed), reading the writing of others, especially those employing a vocabulary that includes another language (or dialect or whatever the word is).
    much in common, being from a coastal area where there are more words for fog than there are for sunny skies
    good Six

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  7. Frank Hubeny says:

    Very nice dialog with one’s self and an inability to remember the boring stuff. I like how some of what was remembered was also an act of pretending.

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  8. So, you are hiding in plain sight. Just a matter of time, ole’ bean.

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  9. Chris Hall says:

    I see ambiguity in this tale… did he or didn’t he? man or spirit?
    (dreich is one of my favourite Scottish words)

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  10. Great six, CE. Why do I suspect that one day we’re going to find out these tales are all true confessions? 🙂

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  11. The atmosphere in the first sentence is so palpable. An eerie tale, I’m not totally convinced this is the story of a living man but rather that of a man unaware his corporeal self no longer lives.
    At least that’s my first impression, CE!
    Beautifully crafted in your unique, dark style.

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  12. Cassa Bassa says:

    Hm very cold blooded.

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  13. jenne49 says:

    Oh the masterful use of language – such a truly dreich and haunting image conjured up.
    But no actual haunting, as the unforeseen twist reveals!
    It seems wrong to smile at such a grim tale, but it’s so skilfully written and beautifully read – I’m smiling.

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  14. ladysighs says:

    All is not lost as I learned a new word “haar.” I even listened to it being pronounced. Sounded just like “hardy har har.”

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