This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – FLUID
Click here to hear the author read his words:
A Day in the Death
This is one of those days, one of those murky, muggy days, when everything’s a bit, what’s the word, fluid maybe, like nothing’s too solid, there’s nothing to get a hold of, and I seem to exist in a haze, in a swirl of mist, or fog, or even, if I was on the other coast, a haar.
Although my memory is not what it was, I can still remember some things, just not the boring stuff like who I am, where I’m from, and why I’m here.
But I find that, as time passes, all those personal details become increasingly irrelevant, quite meaningless.
I do, I’m pretty sure, remember the important moments of my life, like that cold, dreich evening when everything changed, I did bad things, and that particular life ended.
I think, for example, that I remember why I killed her, and then myself.
Except, of course, that I didn’t actually top myself, did I, because that would have been dumb, and kind of final, so I just pretended that bit.
Sound Bite Fiction 
Very cool. The character is indeed very fluid, having me think first just confused, then it’s a ghost, then maybe still alive but with some dark secrets and no matter it’s all very spooky.
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Sounds like you might be as confused as the writer, D!
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Phantom fools himself.
Spectacular, spooky six!
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Thanks, Liz, I like ‘Spectacular, spooky’!
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It reads to me like the swirling thoughts of an ethereal phantom, CE, who maybe trying to turn the reality into pretence! Quite a ghost story!
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I’m happy it inspired such a comment, Tom!
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Great mysterious 6, Ceayr. It seems he is having inner turmoil. Murder/suicide feeling on this one.
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I like a wee bit mystery, E. M., and pleased you do too
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🙂 thank you, ceayr! Sorry I am just getting to your comment. My new college classes have me bogged down with work.
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He leaves us in a fluid state also, about his ultimate fate.
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I like that wee rhyme you slipped in this time!
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liking the new (for me) wordage… (to devolve into the metaphor of an a certain Cafe & Bistro that shall remain unnamed), reading the writing of others, especially those employing a vocabulary that includes another language (or dialect or whatever the word is).
much in common, being from a coastal area where there are more words for fog than there are for sunny skies
good Six
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In Scotland we have 1,314 words for rain and sometimes less than 1 for sunshine!
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Very nice dialog with one’s self and an inability to remember the boring stuff. I like how some of what was remembered was also an act of pretending.
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Thanks, Frank, I do like muddy waters
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So, you are hiding in plain sight. Just a matter of time, ole’ bean.
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Just a shadow in the shadows, mon vieux
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I see ambiguity in this tale… did he or didn’t he? man or spirit?
(dreich is one of my favourite Scottish words)
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I leave that for each reader to decide, Chris.
And aye, it’s a stoatir o a wurd!
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Great six, CE. Why do I suspect that one day we’re going to find out these tales are all true confessions? 🙂
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My stories are littered with folk who thought that, Doug…
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The atmosphere in the first sentence is so palpable. An eerie tale, I’m not totally convinced this is the story of a living man but rather that of a man unaware his corporeal self no longer lives.
At least that’s my first impression, CE!
Beautifully crafted in your unique, dark style.
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I love your last sentence, Denise, much appreciated.
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Hm very cold blooded.
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Yeah, well…
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Oh the masterful use of language – such a truly dreich and haunting image conjured up.
But no actual haunting, as the unforeseen twist reveals!
It seems wrong to smile at such a grim tale, but it’s so skilfully written and beautifully read – I’m smiling.
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Me too, at your comment.
Thanks, Jenne.
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All is not lost as I learned a new word “haar.” I even listened to it being pronounced. Sounded just like “hardy har har.”
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I confess, dear Lady, that I felt like a character from the great RLS’ Treasure Island uttering piratically ‘Aargh, Jim lad’!
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