
This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – MUNDANE
Click here to hear the author read his words:
Pictures
I always see pictures inside my head, memories, dreams and wishes, vivid and alive.
I am with my grandson in the park hunting dragons, or dancing closely with someone who once loved me, or back in my homeland, on the banks and braes of Bonnie Doon, perfect flakes of happiness.
Recently the pictures are different, still real, but more mundane, and somehow I know, deep down, that they’re showing me the future.
I see my apartment, with the breadboard and knife, last night’s dishes in the drying rack, my bed, unmade.
But something’s missing.
I don’t see me.
May that future be you missing because you’re dancing in the kilt with a haggis or two.
Nice artwork by Phil, as well!
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Laughing.
My haggis-dancing days are long gone, Liz!
I stole the image from our YouTube tale of Jack the Little Giant:
which I hope you’ll visit and treat with due seriousness!
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That was very cute. Meant for a grandson, perhaps?
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Indeed, Liz.
Phil and I did a 3-book series (which I condensed into one video).
It was fun!
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Christmas Carol-ish, but without the turnaround happy ending. Nicely done.
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I hadn’t thought of it like that, D, but I take your point.
Thanks!
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Brilliantly crafted–and I agree the ending is devastating, grabbed my heart.
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Thank you, Zelda.
I hope your heart has recovered!
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Yes I’ve recovered 🙂
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let me throw in my own, trés cool Six, yo
Simple, engaging with a killer last line.
Good Sixifying
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Cheers, Clark
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What a devastating final line! That really brought me up short. Excellent Six.
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Thanks, Chris, much appreciated
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“I don’t see me.” I really got to thinking about that sentence as other responders did. Of course it means different things to each of us.
I think of past experiences with family or friends and remember how important a happening was to me. How life changing an event or interaction with them seemed to me. And surely they must have felt the same way. Then many years later upon bringing up said events to the family/friends, they have no recall of the experience/conversations.
And I think, “Was I even there? Was I only imagining?”
Pinch me! 😉
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Now that’s an invitation I haven’t received for a while, dear Lady!
But your point is valid, this is why we make such unreliable witnesses.
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I had to return to see just what invitation you had received from moi.
OH! The invite you got was meant for someone else! Yours was only to be an invite to follow my blog.
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It seems you are trifling with my affections, dear lady!
Whoever you invited to pinch you, I will meet tomorrow at dawn, pillows at ten paces.
The cad has met his match!
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I would expect nothing less. And maybe a bit more.
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Very powerful set of sentences. My heart dropped at “I don’t see me.”
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Thank you, Ms Kingston, and welcome to Sound Bite Fiction
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You’re most welcome, Ceayr! I am happy to be here.
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The days are long but the years are short, as Gretchen Ruben says.
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And getting shorter, as each one passes…
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Deep and well-crafted, CE. Have you tried mirrors? 😉
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With my face?
Aaarrgghhh!
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oh dear! Pandora’s box, that pesky polutor.
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So true, sir!
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How soon that future??
Well crafted CE. You lead the reader calmly down 6 sentences towards the fate awaits us all.
I too enjoyed “perfect flakes of happiness”.
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No time stamp on my dreams, Denise!
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It never pays to open that Pandora’s Box. Those cliff hangers are a doozy
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Too true, Larry, that way lies madness
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I like the thought of hunting dragons with one’s grandson. Nice ending: not seeing oneself in the picture.
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Some of the best days of my life, Frank
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Very powerful CEAyr.
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Thank you, Lindsey.
And it’s not even a poem!
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If pictures of the future start appearing in my head I’ll be pressing the delete button. I’d rather not know!
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Sometimes that’s best, mon brave!
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How is it possible to sum up life in six sentences?
Because that’s what you’ve done so deftly, with its joys and its sadness.
‘Flakes of happiness’ – exquisite expression
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Thanks, Jenne, I’m glad it worked for you.
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