Pictures – Six Sentence Story

Artwork by Phil Burns

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – MUNDANE

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Pictures

I always see pictures inside my head, memories, dreams and wishes, vivid and alive.

I am with my grandson in the park hunting dragons, or dancing closely with someone who once loved me, or back in my homeland, on the banks and braes of Bonnie Doon, perfect flakes of happiness.

Recently the pictures are different, still real, but more mundane, and somehow I know, deep down, that they’re showing me the future.

I see my apartment, with the breadboard and knife, last night’s dishes in the drying rack, my bed, unmade.

But something’s missing.

I don’t see me.

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39 Responses to Pictures – Six Sentence Story

  1. Liz H says:

    May that future be you missing because you’re dancing in the kilt with a haggis or two.
    Nice artwork by Phil, as well!

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  2. Christmas Carol-ish, but without the turnaround happy ending. Nicely done.

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  3. Zelda Winter says:

    Brilliantly crafted–and I agree the ending is devastating, grabbed my heart.

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  4. clark says:

    let me throw in my own, trés cool Six, yo
    Simple, engaging with a killer last line.
    Good Sixifying

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  5. Chris Hall says:

    What a devastating final line! That really brought me up short. Excellent Six.

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  6. ladysighs says:

    “I don’t see me.” I really got to thinking about that sentence as other responders did. Of course it means different things to each of us.

    I think of past experiences with family or friends and remember how important a happening was to me. How life changing an event or interaction with them seemed to me. And surely they must have felt the same way. Then many years later upon bringing up said events to the family/friends, they have no recall of the experience/conversations.

    And I think, “Was I even there? Was I only imagining?”
    Pinch me! 😉

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  7. emkingston says:

    Very powerful set of sentences. My heart dropped at “I don’t see me.”

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  8. The days are long but the years are short, as Gretchen Ruben says.

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  9. Deep and well-crafted, CE. Have you tried mirrors? 😉

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  10. UP says:

    oh dear! Pandora’s box, that pesky polutor.

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  11. How soon that future??
    Well crafted CE. You lead the reader calmly down 6 sentences towards the fate awaits us all.
    I too enjoyed “perfect flakes of happiness”.

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  12. It never pays to open that Pandora’s Box. Those cliff hangers are a doozy

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  13. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like the thought of hunting dragons with one’s grandson. Nice ending: not seeing oneself in the picture.

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  14. Lindsey says:

    Very powerful CEAyr.

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  15. If pictures of the future start appearing in my head I’ll be pressing the delete button. I’d rather not know!

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  16. jenne49 says:

    How is it possible to sum up life in six sentences?
    Because that’s what you’ve done so deftly, with its joys and its sadness.
    ‘Flakes of happiness’ – exquisite expression

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