The Wind – Carrot Ranch

Artwork by Phil Burns

The Carrot Ranch Challenge:
In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story inspired by “Across the Water”.

Click here to hear the author read his words:

The Wind

I arrive at the headland, exhausted.
The wind-driven snow in my face has made the trip long and hazardous.
These hills can be dangerous even in calm weather.
Across the water I see the lights of home.
Where she is, with the children, my love, and my life.
Not far by boat, but I am on foot.
Another fourteen miles hard trek.
Suddenly the wind lifts again, and I am instantly alert.
My hunter’s senses are keen.
Something is not right.
Bad tidings sweep across the bay.
The sound of misery.
The scent of fear.
The smell of blood.

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16 Responses to The Wind – Carrot Ranch

  1. You started slow and brought us to a harrowing ending. I’m not really sure what to say other than if a story touches all the bases (baseball idiom) then this is it.

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  3. Charli Mills says:

    What a horror to be so close yet too far to help one’s family in mortal danger. Well done.

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  4. Kate McElderry says:

    Whew… intense. Powerful. Well done!

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  5. Oh. My. What a homecoming, how awful to be close enough to sense the danger but too far to do anything about it. Well told.

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  6. Liz H says:

    Hopeful homecoming, comes with a sense of dire foreboding. We imagine the rest…
    So well done!

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  7. Liz H says:

    Hopeful homecoming, comes with a sense of direr foreboding. We imagine the rest…
    So well done!

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  8. jenne49 says:

    The master at work!
    You tell a story, a happening, yes, but you also convey the sense of the whole life that this happening is part of.
    And all without a superfluous word.
    Powerful stuff.

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