Down – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by Na’ama Yehuda.

© Na’ama Yehuda

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Down

It’s a long way down.
I peer over the edge and shudder.
I’m not good with heights.
But it’s been a terrible year.
My wife left me for my best friend.
I miss him.
My dog died.
I miss him too.
My business collapsed.
I’m broke, totally skint.
And it’s cold, so cold.
Scotland in the winter is brutal.
Another three months of this wind, sleet and merciless hail.
And tonight is Hogmanay.
No celebrations, I’ll be alone.
Miserable.
Nothing to look forward to.
It’s a long way down.
I sigh.
Take a deep breath.
And head for the elevator.

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May I invite any of you with a couple of minutes to spare to visit my latest YouTube extravaganza, a fun piece based on a trilogy of children’s books I wrote some years ago, and featuring the amazing artwork of my friend and long-time colleague Phil Burns.

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43 Responses to Down – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Good one! You carried me along with apprehension, and then dropped me. 😀

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  2. rogershipp says:

    “My wife left me for my best friend.
    I miss him.”

    Oh my. I loved this pair of lines!!!

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  3. athling2001 says:

    Wasn’t sure what he was going to do there for a minute.

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  4. A poem of regret, and loss, a necessary mood perhaps, darkness before the new dawn ? I like the last line very much.

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  5. James McEwan says:

    Wishing you a happy and wonderful New Year 2021.

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  6. Thanks for reading your stories. I appreciate it!
    Ronda

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  7. plaridel says:

    at first, i thought he was junping from the top of the building. what a twist. 🙂

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  8. Great story and rising tension. I liked the YouTube video as well. Happy New Year. Hope yours is better than the one in your story.

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  9. liz young says:

    You wound the tension up brilliantly!

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  10. draliman says:

    Phew! I like missing the best friend rather than the wife.

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  11. granonine says:

    Oh, you got me! I did not see the elevator coming, but I should have when you dropped the hint about not doing well with heights. I’m off to bed shortly, with a smile on my face thinking about losing your wife and missing your best friend 🙂

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  12. pennygadd51 says:

    Delightful humour, CE. I loved the twist especially.

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  13. bearmkwa says:

    Shewww, that was a close call there. Glad you decided to take the elevator instead. 🙂 Happy New year!

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  14. Dora says:

    Whew! That was close. I really though he was going to take the dive. So glad he hasn’t hit bottom …yet! I enjoyed the YouTube story of Jack the Little Giant. What fun artwork too!

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  15. trentpmcd says:

    haha. The cold rooftop of a tall building on a windy day is a great place to bare your soul to the universe, making that elevator ride back down a lot nicer.

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  16. Going down and down and down to the catacomb of finality. Thanks for the chuckle chum!

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  17. Michael says:

    A glass of vintage port to you sir, for an interesting take on the prompt.

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  18. Not sure which is funnier, him missing the friend his wife left him for or heading over to the elevator (after seeming as though he’d jump). 😂

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  19. Dear CE,

    That was rather dismal…with a little humor tossed in.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  20. Tannille says:

    Miss everything but the wife… awesome! Glad he took the lift and didn’t jump.

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  21. neilmacdon says:

    I loved “My wife left me for my best friend. I miss him”. Comic brilliance

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