Going – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
And the prompt photo, which this week is provided courtesy of
Ted Strutz
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Ted Strutz

Click here to hear the writer read his words:


Okay, I have to go now.
You know that, right?
And you have to stay here, and do the things you have to do.
I understand that.
Things have been difficult recently, difficult for both of us, but that doesn’t change how I feel.
I’m not sure if by leaving I’ll make things better, or worse.
Parting makes the heart…
Out of sight…
As much conflict there as there is here.
So I just wanted to clear the air before I go.
I think you believe me when I say I love you.
But I don’t know if you care.

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61 Responses to Going – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Penny L Howe says:

    Sometimes … words aren’t needed.


  2. Nan Falkner says:

    WOW! Your last line was impressive – whoever knows for sure what is in the others heart unless you have wonderful memories with a person!! This is a great story! Thanks!


  3. Oh my…that hurt my heart.


  4. James McEwan says:

    The doubt and emotional sense of loss prevails throughout, a sense that life is going to change and there is a strange feeling of emptiness coming through. I liked this.


  5. Abhijit Ray says:

    Sometimes distance makes the love go strong. May be you are making the right decision. Give time to understand why there is so much argument.


  6. Mmmmm! I wonder how many times we do this, not just with people we have intimate relationships with, but friends we have known for years and it just doesn’t work anymore. “Breaking up” doesn’t always need to involve lovers. Thanks for reminding me of that,


  7. pennygadd51 says:

    Another terrific story, CE. How clever of you to catch the embarrassment of such a parting, along with its very real painfulness.


  8. He’s leaving but I don’t think he wants to. I get the feeling he wants her to tell him to stay. Another amazing piece!


  9. draliman says:

    A slightly awkward-sounding breakup 🙂


  10. granonine says:

    What a realistic, painful conversation. Well done.


  11. A story many can relate to I’m sure. Brilliant CE.


  12. Sandra says:

    Neil’s right. There should be a whole new verb for that kind of leaving. Beautifully done. I’m beginning to wonder whether you don’t have a better talent for killing off relationships than you do people.


  13. Danny James says:

    How true that can be for some of us.


  14. There is so much raw emotion packed into this one sir. Bravo!


  15. 4963andypop says:

    You have such a knack for saying a lot in short simple words. Poignant tale of the realization of how lop-sided a relationship truly is. Ouch.


  16. Nobbinmaug says:

    That’s rough and raw and real. It’s very emotional. It reminds me of something from my life. I’m still not sure if it was right or wrong or where I went wrong.


  17. Oh god, that was brilliant, I read and listened, its a different level, brilliant stuff


  18. bearmkwa says:

    Profound. Love those last two lines… they say so much!


  19. Iain Kelly says:

    Perhaps his leaving will awaken her, but I suspect he may find he ends up forgotten. Very well written CE.


  20. Staying or going, never an easy decision. Nicely done CE


  21. Dale says:

    Loved this! And man, been there, done that, in a manner of speaking.


  22. A good story with feeling and well written, C.E. As my late mother used to say, “I don’t watch TV serials as I have enough troubles of my own without watching those of others.” Don’t we all. 🙂 — Suzanne


  23. Colline says:

    So many relationships end like this.


  24. Beautiful, thought provoking story.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos


  25. Dear CE,

    A bit of a gut-wrencher fraught with conflict and emotion. Nicely done.




  26. Mike says:

    She cares, she has to, It’s a fine piece of writing.


  27. Tannille says:

    Strong emotions here. Torn.
    Well done!


  28. neilmacdon says:

    There should be a verb for this type of going. You describe it beautifully


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