Going Out – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
his week’s chilly image comes courtesy of Dale Rogerson.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Dale Rogerson

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Going Out

Me: Where’s my good jacket?
Her: Are you going out again?
Yes it’s, um, business.
Of course it is.
Where’s my new shirt?
You are dressing up for an evening business meeting?
Well I, er, need to look smart.
Of course you do.
Where are my boots of Spanish leather?
Same place as the rest of your things.
That isn’t very helpful, is it?
I put them all out for you.
Oh, thanks!
I thought you deserved that.
Come over to the window.
The window?
Do you see that big black bag lying in the snow?
Goodbye, sweetie.

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59 Responses to Going Out – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Just as it should be done! I do so love boots of Spanish leather, but it all depends on who’s wearing them!


  2. michael1148humphris says:

    What a lad. He will have to hurry. I hear that a tramp has his boots.🙂


  3. Lynn Love says:

    Love how you’ve constructed this, C. The hints at his duplicity, the slow revelation that she is onto his game and won’t stand for it any longer. She definitely taught that one a lesson! Well written C


  4. Girls got smarts!
    Fun read.


  5. subroto says:

    A touch of frost in the lady’s behaviour but then revenge is a dish best served cold.


  6. Margaret says:

    Very funny. I like her style.


  7. gahlearner says:

    Hehe, that made me snort. That nerve of his, expecting her to have all his stuff ready, ‘where is this, where is that’ for his ‘business’ meeting. He doesn’t deserve a smart woman like her.


  8. deborahsdeliberations says:

    The last line made me chuckle.


  9. Anita says:

    She threw his things! Now he has to get the bag to look smart 🙂

    Out Of Sight & Out Of This World – Anita


  10. Class! Really well done, he deserved that one, so brazen, what an idiot!


  11. James McEwan says:

    I liked the causal approach and the finality of the situation.


  12. plaridel says:

    if he didn’t get the hint, he must be too dense. 🙂


  13. draliman says:

    Heh heh, made me smile! Poor chap. Or maybe he has somewhere else to hang his hat (if he can find it)…


  14. Bear says:

    Congrats on being first to post this week! 🙂 Great little write, too!


  15. Abhijit says:

    She threw you out. May be good looking Tony has something to do with it. But you are not blameless either! Who wears a pair of perfectly good shoe on a snowed out evening?


    • ceayr says:

      Dang, I haven’t seen him around, you might be right!
      And they are boots of Spanish leather, sir, a chap has to look good regardless of the weather


  16. Gouy Corine says:

    Très drôle , J’ADORE ! 😂
    Cela me rappelle une histoire , je te la raconterai.


  17. 4963andypop says:

    She sounds like she has been through this before, these evening business meetings. My money was on her pushing him out the window!


  18. msjadeli says:

    Very well told!


  19. Ha ha – I liked the way you used the bag as your focus for the story.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos


  20. Great dialogue! I love how helpful she was, so much so she helped him out the door. Yay! =)


  21. He got his just deserts. Was she wearing a leopard skinned pill box hat to go with his boots of Spanish Leather?


  22. athling2001 says:

    Great take. At least he wasn’t in the bag with his shoes.


  23. A good story, C.E. I loved the ending. At least he wasn’t put out in that bag. 😀 — Suzanne


  24. That’s cold. 🙂


  25. granonine says:

    Out in the cold, for sure. I love the way you built up to that wonderful coup de gras.


  26. trentpmcd says:

    lol, yep, it sounds like he deserved for her to put his things out….


  27. Tien Skye says:

    Hah! Good one! I laugh at the ending!


  28. Tannille says:

    Enjoyed the subtle banter!


  29. Dear CE,

    I like her style. It sounds like he had it coming. Nothing like a big black bag for taking out the garbage. Good one.




  30. Iain Kelly says:

    Making her point without subtlety, probably what was needed. Nice use of the detail and gave me a chuckle.


  31. emmylgant says:

    You are a funny guy!
    I agree, great use of the black garbage bag.


  32. Varad says:

    Oops! Shouldn’t have tried his luck when its snowing outside. As Neil said, great use of the bag. Well done, CE.


  33. neilmacdon says:

    Great use of the black bag

    Liked by 1 person

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