Almost Home – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s photo
comes from ‘Rudolph’ Gayer, and prompted me to write a sequel to a tale I wrote on Sunday for a different challenge:
https://ceayr.com/2018/12/30/distant-hills-sunday-photo-fiction/
But I think it stands alone, regardless.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Russell Gayer


Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Almost Home

I will never have a luckier escape.
Out in the desert, my horse dying on its feet.
They were
all around me, closing fast.
But that sudden sandstorm reduced visibility to
a couple of yards.
I walked through them unscathed.
Now I have grass under my feet, the hills look much closer.
They won’t follow me over the ridge, their honour forbids it.
T
hen three more days and I’ll be home.
Not quite the conquering hero, but job done.
I will be forgiven, at least
by her.
The wind has dropped again.
I look behind me.
I’m not safe yet.

 

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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52 Responses to Almost Home – Friday Fictioneers

  1. gahlearner says:

    A very exciting story–just not for him, his future isn’t looking too bright.

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  2. Very atmospheric. I felt as if I were looking behind as he did.

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  3. Margaret says:

    Lots to ponder in this. His fortunes rise and fall with every change in the wind. Poor man. I hope he makes it and I hope she really will forgive him, whatever he’s done.

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  4. StuHN says:

    I pictured the Wild West. Boundaries are not always broken.

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  5. Violet Lentz says:

    I’m with Rachel. I wanna know what he’s running from. If it’s something he needs to be forgiven for it’s probably juicy!!! Thanks again CE.

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  6. 4963andypop says:

    His relief at getting away seems to be short lived. Hope he brought a wire cutter!

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  7. Piyali says:

    A great continuation of the Sunday story (SPFC) !

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  8. Oh no, they are determined to follow him. I could feel the tension. Superbly told and great last line. Again, I enjoyed listening to the audio!

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  9. granonine says:

    Oh, the danger is looking back! But if you don’t, you won’t know what hit you—-lots of tension here, for sure.

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  10. Mike says:

    Let’s hope he makes it, conquering hero or not.
    Nice work.

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  11. Abhijit Ray says:

    Luck is playing hide and seek. At one moment it is hiding him from near capture, at the other moment he is being exposed. Hope he reaches home safe, if not as a hero.

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  12. I can see another sequel on the horizon sir 🙂

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  13. Susan says:

    I knew he would find a way out. At least for the moment. Of course, great stories never make it easy on the hero.

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  14. Mike says:

    I enjoyed this for me a sequel, but it does stand alone well. Now I need to know why their honor will decent them carrying on after him

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  15. For some reason, ‘I will be forgiven, at least by her’ really sits with me. Lovely write.

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  16. As long as there’s life there’s hope… just another day or two, and who knows… you can be lucky twice (and even thrice)

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  17. I can’t help but wonder what he did… can’t be too bad if she can still forgive him. This leaves me very curious and hopeful that he makes it home.

    Great read!
    -Rachel

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  18. Anita says:

    Safety in enemy territory is tough.
    Hope he makes it to his home.
    Wish you a very happy new year!
    Zapped – Anita

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  19. Sandra says:

    I’m hoping he makes it. He sounds like a phlegmatic soul – he deserves to succeed.

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  20. Lynn Love says:

    He’s a lucky man, for now. But who knows what waits round the next bend? Atmospheric and exciting stuff, C

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  21. Dear CE,

    I could feel the tension in this one. A lot of story layered between the lines I think…without going back and reading the prequel. It does stand alone. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  22. Oh, I love this. For me he is the underdog and i am rooting for him. Who are we to take moralistic stances? Happy New Year Ceayr.

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  23. Varad says:

    This is almost like a song. I remembered ‘A Horse With No Name’ by America. Wonderfully written, CE

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  24. A chase, I love a chase! Great stuff

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  25. neilmacdon says:

    I’m rooting for him. Nicely atmospheric

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  26. Iain Kelly says:

    He got away in the end… Or has he? Perhaps it depends on the next prompt picture!

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