Parallel Lives – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s photo is by Dawn M. Miller, a superior writer and, indeed, a superior lady.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Dawn M. Miller

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Parallel Lives

We were born on the same day.
He in a private clinic, me in a grubby back room.
While still children, we travelled often.
He in luxury to exotic locations, me from one foster home to the next.
We went away to school.
He to an ancient and expensive seat of learning, me to a government-approved institution.
We made our way in the world.
His name opened doors, my handgun opened wallets.
Our lives ended on the same day.
His when he was stabbed through the heart, mine when they caught me, bloody knife in hand, taking his wallet.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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56 Responses to Parallel Lives – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Kira says:

    Love the way the two lives were intertwined from the get go of the story! And the way it came full circle from birth to death! Great read!

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  2. I love the way this came full circle.
    And thanks for the intro, you are too kind.

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  3. James McEwan says:

    The way of the world a clash of the classes. Very French.

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  4. michael1148humphris says:

    Queen or pauper, wealthy or not, when ones time is up its time to go. A neat comparison of two lifestyles

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  5. I recently saw an obituary in the paper of a man who shared the same birth date as I. Not sure how he died. Someone said he was reading a blog and just fell over dead.

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    • ceayr says:

      Was it you, Russell?
      Is this your subtle way of breaking the news that you have popped your clogs, gone to pastures greener, shuffled off the old mortal, etc, etc?

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  6. Violet Lentz says:

    Round and round we go. Love this!

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  7. wildchild47 says:

    Well hell’s bells for whom it all tolls. Great job C.E.

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  8. pennygadd51 says:

    Good idea to take the parallel tracks as your inspiration for two lives. Truly, much of our life is determined by the dumb luck of where we were born and who our parents were.

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    • ceayr says:

      Thanks, Penny. And you are right, of course, for millions of children across the world being born is not a blessing, but a curse to be endured with minimal hope.

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  9. Abhijit Ray says:

    Two live running parallel, may be met in afterlife.

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  10. An epic ‘couple’, just non-romantic for a change 🙂

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  11. When the last moment of truth touches us, everyone ends on the same spot…

    I really like what this tale says about living and status and endings.

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  12. So. I have to admit. That I don’t usually listen to your posts. I like reading. But this one. Your reading of it was so skillful (and, I liked the accent because I’m a silly amurcan). I liked that their lives were indirectly entwined even to the end. Well done!

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  13. Love the contrasts you expose in this piece.

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  14. Kestril Trueseeker says:

    I can’t help but be curious about the perspective of his “twin”. Perhaps I am a cynic, but I wonder if he ended up a cad too in his own way.

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  15. In the end maybe all those differences don’t make a difference. the soil is the same six feet under.

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  16. jillyfunnell says:

    A hand gun that opens wallets. What a graphic phrase. A great illustration of lines of travel in life.

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  17. Wonderful story! Love the contrast between the two lives.

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  18. I like where you took the parallel lines of the railroad tracks and made the lives collide.

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  19. granonine says:

    Comparison/contrast at its best. And the ending? So sad. A lose/lose.

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  20. lisarey1990 says:

    Lovely contrasting.

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  21. Linked on opposite sides, starting and ending together. Brilliant!

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  22. trentpmcd says:

    Forever linked. Nice write.

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  23. Iain Kelly says:

    A Tale of Two Lives in 100 words – would make a great movie.

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  24. Lines 1-3 and 5-11 were brilliant too! So, they departed on the same day – one went up and one went down presumably.

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  25. Born and died on the same day. Good contrasts between the two.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  26. I agree with Sandra. The fourth line was a gem. Superbly written Ceayr.

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  27. Sandra says:

    That fourth from the end line is a cracker! Good one, CE. Very nicely paced.

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  28. neilmacdon says:

    he should never have switched from the handgun

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