The Night – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s delightful photo prompt is provided by the equally delightful Gah Learner.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Gah Learner

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

The Night

The night is cold and dark.
I stare out of the greasy window of my dingy room, taut with fear.
I can see nothing, but I know it is coming.
I wrap my arms around myself, squeezing tightly, trying to contain the emotion building within.
I know it is a futile gesture.
Nothing I do can prevent the approaching horror.
The moon appears suddenly from behind the black clouds.
I feel the hairs on my neck bristle.
I look down at my too long fingernails as they start to scratch at the glass.
I throw back my head and howl.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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83 Responses to The Night – Friday Fictioneers

  1. I had the song “Thriller” playing in my head while reading this.

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  2. Meha Sharma says:

    Chilling. Great take indeed.

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  3. Oh we really saw the similarity in the image… the angst of transforming must be terrible.

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  4. I wondered how many of us would have a similar take. Nicely done.

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  5. YIKES … fingernails on glass … and … howling.
    It sounds like a Halloween story gone mad. LOL
    Isadora 😎

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  6. The howl and the fingernails gave me shivers. The chill and darkness of the night match his soul. You showed well his turmoil.

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  7. It happens to me when I hear the “lighthouse family” or the Dj Steve Wright, sends a chill down my spine and makes me want to kill!!
    Good stuff

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  8. lisarey1990 says:

    So eerie. Great job!

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  9. MythRider says:

    The werewolf again answers the beckon call of the moon.

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  10. Kalpana Solsi says:

    The sounds of fingernails scratching against the glass gives me goosebumps.

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  11. subroto says:

    There is nothing more frightening than listening to fingernails as they start to scratch at the glass. I felt a shiver down my spine just reading it 😉

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  12. I really like the way you quietly built up the mood of menace, leaving spaces for us to speculate what the horror is. Great last line to round off the story.

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  13. gahlearner says:

    Uh, yes, I can see that your story is identical to mine only… your protagonist, once changed, won’t be Prince Charming either. Seriously: I like the mounting tension, how the feelings change from fear to release.

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  14. Abhijit Ray says:

    Man turning to a beast on a full moon night.

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  15. How about a bowl of whole grain cereal with a side of rye toast? And if that doesn’t make you feel better, we’ll take you to the groomer and have your paws shaved.

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  16. Don’t worry little werewolf, everything will turn out all right once the night passes 🙂

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  17. Now this is a different take for you, and I like it. C.E. as werewolf! 🙂

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  18. Susan says:

    Nicely done C.E. I felt the tension rise throughout the story.

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  19. StuHN says:

    Aroooooooo. Who’s that I see walking through these woods? 🙂

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  20. 4963andypop says:

    Your sound bite was especially frightening with the scratchy sound of your voice reading it! I half expected a real howl at the end. I love the idea that he has no control over the transformaton. Very dr jekyll and mr hyde!

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    • ceayr says:

      Sadly that is just how my voice sounds!
      Flattered beyond words at mention of my compatriot RLS.

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      • 4963andypop says:

        Consider yourself lucky then, it is a very good reading voice and you use it well. Tailor made for audiobooks at least on the American market.

        I also think, if you dont mind me getting on my high horse ( again) that it’s a great idea to have an audible version of your work ( or anyone’s work, in their own voice). Especially with short works and poetry, which tend to be packed with double meanings and allusions. It can be hard for the reader to read to themselves, properly, on the first try. The author’s intonation, stress, and other verbal “tells” bring a lot of meaning with them and can clarify ambiguity and call attention to nuances.

        And its a heck of lot better than listening to today’s computer voice readers. 🙂

        In addition, it is an accessible, ie respectful tip of the hat to anyone in your audience, for whom reading by eye is difficult, if not impossible, or who simply want to do it while doing dishes or gardening for example, as people do in these days of multitasking.

        As for Robert Louis Stephenson (sp?), he’s one of my favorites. My first poem ever (at about 10) was an RLS knockoff! His prose is excellent as an adult or a kid, so you are in great company!:).

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  21. Corine Gouy says:

    La prochaine pleine lune ! C’est le 25 septembre , il faut que je charge mon fusil avec des balles en argent .
    J’ADORE ton histoire !

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  22. James McEwan says:

    I love this, there is nothing like a good Werewolf story beneath a full moon. Whooooooooo!

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  23. granonine says:

    Slowly, slowly you took us to the horrible realization. Very well done.

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  24. I used to be all right, until I read this. Nice retelling of a classic, C. E.

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  25. Rowena says:

    Perhaps, my Nancy was deceived. It wasn’t Apollo but your alter-ego who swept her off her feet at the pier.
    Great take CE. I was thinking of going down the werewolf path and having the werewolf restrained in some way and knowing he can’t escape and how to cope with their inevitable transformation.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  26. pennygadd51 says:

    You re-tell this classic with panache, CE. You conjure up the man’s horror nicely.

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  27. emmylgant says:

    Good thing I know you to be a real softy…
    The dread of what is coming has a very fluid and compelling build up.
    Good job CE.

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  28. The moon brings that out in some. Welcome back.

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  29. I always thought there was something different about you!

    Click to visit Keith’s Ramblings!

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  30. Très bien construit ce texte j’aime beaucoup 🙂

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  31. michael1148humphris says:

    I trust you will not howl to long, as I need my beauty sleep.😉

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  32. jillyfunnell says:

    I think we know what’s coming as well. Whatever you do, folks, don’t try and approach it. Well done!

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  33. Sandra says:

    I think there’ll be a hot time in the old town tonight. Might stay home, I think.

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  34. neilmacdon says:

    I liked “I can see nothing but I know it is coming”

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