The Loch – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s photo prompt comes
courtesy of Ted Strutz, and radiates a warmth and tranquillity that I hope is reflected in my rather romantic tale.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Ted Strutz

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

The Loch

There is nothing quite as relaxing as going out on the loch.
Especially in the evening, when it’s deserted.
They are going to find it very relaxing.
My wife.
My best friend.
They think I don’t know.
They’re in for a surprise.
I’ve got a gun.
A midnight swim, with the anchor around their ankles.
Poor CE.
He doesn’t suspect a thing.
We never meant this to happen.
He has been my best friend since school.
He’d be devastated to find out, so we have no choice.
I’ve got a gun.
A midnight swim, with the anchor around his ankles.

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69 Responses to The Loch – Friday Fictioneers

  1. notestowomen says:

    It’s uncanny how these two friends are thinking alike and have hatched the same plan.


  2. Jan Morrill says:

    Oh wow! I couldn’t help but imagine the next scene–the wife, sailing back to the harbor, alone. Loved this, though you inspired a bit of darkness in me:

    Neither knew I’d tired of them both. I had a gun. Now, they will glare at each other for eternity, an anchor tied round their ankles. There is nothing quite as relaxing as going out on the loch.


  3. lisarey1990 says:

    Leaves you wanting to know what happens next. Great write.


  4. I’m a bloke and my eyes were tired!!


  5. Brilliant, I really loved that. I listened to you reading it, an awesome tale


  6. Oh! what a delightful switch-a-roo!


  7. James McEwan says:

    Nasty, but then what if they do know and they have the bullets? Revenge is wrong but so, so sweet.


  8. plaridel says:

    methinks it’s just him fantasizing. he needs another drink.


  9. There surely must be money involved. He wouldn’t kill just for the sport….would he?


  10. subroto says:

    Ah! Romance ain’t it sweet. With both dead the wife can move on to other victims 😉


  11. The last line of each paragraph/stanza (can’t quite make up my mind if it reads like poetry) are fantastic. The rings with such menace.


  12. I rather liked Penny’s sequel. Of course, the wife could always kill them both and move on to her next conquest.

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  13. Sandra says:

    It’s going to be a busy night, down there in the loch. I think I know who’s going to emerge victorious though, and rightly so, for the purposes of spine-chilling sound bite fiction.


  14. That is one threesome that is sure to be explosive! Like the style of writing here.


  15. Ut oh. The surprise is who will win…but since the narrator is still talking he gets the prize. And yes, there may have been a slight eye-roll when I read “romantic” in the into. 😀


  16. MythRider says:

    Best friends who not only love the same woman, but think exactly a like. Won’t they be surprise when they get to the other side.


  17. granonine says:

    Yikes! No happy ending here.


  18. 4963andypop says:

    Anything but relaxing!


  19. pennygadd51 says:

    They’ll each spend the evening drinking to give themselves courage for murder. They’ll both fire and miss. This will bring home to them the enormity of what they have just attempted. They’ll share the remains of the whisky, and fall into each others arms, weeping and maudlin. Whereupon the boat will capsize, and they’ll both get caught in the anchor chain.

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  20. Corine Gouy says:

    Qui va servir de nourriture aux poissons ?
    CE où sa femme et son amant ?
    Je parie une petite pièce sur …..


  21. I wonder if they are all tied to the same anchor… it could come as a nasty surprise for the one who shoots first.


  22. StuHN says:

    Nice. Who fires first? Not Han Solo. 🙂


  23. Rowena says:

    Loved how you constructed this CE. In keeping with my contribution this week, I’ve become aware of this dire plot and have jumped in my speed boat and am coming to the rescue. However, will I be caught in the cross fire? Don’t believe any of your mates can let you go down without coming to your defense.
    Best wishes,


  24. sailajaP14 says:

    CE! You’d better win! Can’t do without your stories. 😀


  25. trentpmcd says:

    Hmm, I wonder who is going to take that midnight swim…


  26. Mike says:

    I enjoyed this.
    Wonder who will come out on top?


  27. Dear CE,

    Are we not spared another murder? High drama here, too.




  28. michael1148humphris says:

    Pistols at dawn, and no one wins, I enjoyed the looping style of this piece


  29. Iain Kelly says:

    An inadvertent race to the bottom. Pistols at midnight, who will win? We’ll see if you are back next week or not.

    Liked by 1 person

  30. Sounds like it’s going to be an eventful night!


  31. neilmacdon says:

    I know I shouldn’t but that made me laugh


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