Lost Focus – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s
fascinatingly blurry photo by Jill Wisoff made me think of happier times
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Jill Wisoff

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Lost Focus

I know I have been out of sorts recently.
I felt lethargic.
I seemed to have lost my focus.
People were starting to comment.
Just last week, one friend, a lovely English lady, chastised me, quite gently, for my lack of activity.
I don’t know if the problem is advancing years the unsettled weather caused by our appalling treatment of our beautiful planet, or just life.
But I know what makes me feel good.
So I am out again, walking.
Walking the city streets at night.
Enjoying the sights, the sounds, the smells.
Taking it all in.
Looking for prey.

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62 Responses to Lost Focus – Friday Fictioneers

  1. mandibelle16 says:

    Ah, that last line. There is more to him than we first think.


  2. Killer ending after a great build up


  3. lisarey1990 says:

    Very unexpected.


  4. Ah! the expected devious twist. Superb writing, as usual. Ceayr.


  5. jillyfunnell says:

    Fantastic rocket launched at the end.


  6. Mike says:

    Your story reminded me of the tale of Jekyll and Hyde by R L Stevenson, lovely


  7. Oh my…the cage has been opened. :/


  8. It was all so gentle until…! Nice one.

    Welcome to Keith’s Ramblings!


  9. Ha ha ha. Off to the country I go.


  10. Varad says:

    The thrill of the hunt!! Excellent twist, CE.


  11. Always good to get right back on the prowl.


  12. granonine says:

    BAM! I KNEW something unexpected was going to happen. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  13. Corine Gouy says:

    Le chasseur est de retour dans les rues !
    Faut-il surveiller nos arrières ?


  14. I will be careful and look behind me… I guess you don’t carry a telltale ax…. something more subtle like piano wire?

    Liked by 1 person

  15. It’s good you the old C.E. back.


  16. Lynn Love says:

    Haha! Love that. An evil twist after the sweetest of openings – so you! Made me smile (yes, I know, I’m weird) And here’s to the lovely English lady

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  17. I love a story with a sock in the last line 🙂


  18. Susan says:

    Yep. Right there with him, until the last line. I think I gasped. Good one C.E.


  19. pennygadd51 says:

    Really good take on the prompt, and a wonderful twist at the end! You’re back to top form, CE!


  20. Rowena says:

    Hi CE,
    I am going to be very nice to you in future and might even send a cheque in the mail. I related really closely to what your character was saying and really felt right in step with him. Indeed, I thought you really summed up how I’ve been feeling lately and that the smack in the face at the end and I hastily retreated. No. I had nothing in common with this man. Never met him before in my life.
    Very well done. You had me hook, line and sinker.
    Best wishes,


  21. Ohh… that last line!! Great twist! 🙂


  22. James Pyles says:

    Terrific last line.


  23. Iain Kelly says:

    Is the English lady to be classed as muse, accomplice or victim? Besides, what’s wrong with slowing down and enjoying life a bit more.

    Liked by 1 person

  24. Eek! Brilliantly unexpected twist – loved it!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos


  25. Anita says:

    Looked like an elderly person narrating about his life.
    Then, comes the twist!
    The last line opens a world of possibility!
    “Looking for prey” 🙂


  26. neilmacdon says:

    He has hard-to-meet needs


  27. Dear C. E.

    The city better be on the lookout and the lovely (I agree) English lady. Good (?) one.




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