The Cupboard – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
And this week she provides the photo too, a typically cheerful clutter in a typical family cupboard.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields


Click here to hear the author read his 100-word tale:


The Cupboard

I am alone.
I feel very grown-up.
Mummy had to go out, just for a few minutes.
It’s the first time I’ve been in charge.
I’m not frightened.
Well, not very.
Because I hear a noise in the cupboard.
Maybe it’s a spider.
No, spiders don’t make loud rustling noises.
Maybe it’s a mouse.
No, mice don’t move things.
Maybe it’s a rat.
Yes, it must be.
Rats are strong.
They can rustle,
and shove things aside, can’t they?
But I’m pretty sure there’s one thing they can’t do.
Because they don’t have hands.
So why is the handle turning?

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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26 Responses to The Cupboard – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Oh, no, the moving handle. It sounds like the creature that’s found under beds at night. Either that or it’s a neighbor child who snuck in and is trying to scare him. Good writing, C.E. It reminds me of the old TV series “The Twilight Zone”. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  2. Yaaayyyyyy, creepy cool horror. I love it.

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  3. k rawson says:

    Creepy little tale. I worry for the tot!

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  4. Mandie Hines says:

    Well, that can’t be good. I just read a real account of a couple of kids who were left home alone. They were wrestling on their parents’ bed when one fell off and knocked into a bookcase opening a hidden passageway. When they went in to investigate it, they found a small storage area and someone had been staying inside. They found a sleeping bag and snacks. They even found a banana peel that was still yellow. The only way into the storage area was through the bookcase. That story creeped me out a bit, and I just had chills with your story. I’m going to have to go through my house now and make sure I don’t have any hidden passages…especially in the closets.

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  5. Great choice of voice to add to the tension.

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  6. rgayer55 says:

    Perhaps it’s some of the food turning bad. When potatoes go rotten, it’s trouble for everyone. And I’ve seen cheese so moldy, I swear it grew arms.

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  7. Oh do run… sometimes monsters are for real

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  8. Urgh, this is so terrifying. Brilliant voice, and tension.

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  9. I love how this is written in a child’s voice. Closets are were those things that go bump in the night sleep. My oldest daughter to this day won’t go to sleep in her bedroom until she is sure the closet door is closed.

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  10. Lynn Love says:

    Well, I knew when you presented us with a child alone things would end badly and you didn’t disappoint me! You devilish man, torturing that poor kid. But what is in the cupboard? And what will our little adventurer do about it? Wonderfully creepy tale,C

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  11. michael1148humphris says:

    Please don’t leave it there.🙂

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  12. Moon says:

    Wonder what is in there.
    Fabulous storytelling.

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  13. liz young says:

    Wonderful voice you have there. Brilliantly scary.

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  14. Varad says:

    Perfectly creepy! Brilliantly done, CE

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  15. James says:

    That’s certainly a spooky ending. Hope Mummy gets back in a hurry.

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  16. Now that’s what I call a chilling ending! Well done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  17. granonine says:

    Oh my gosh, it’s a living nightmare! You drew the picture very well.

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  18. Oh, the stuff of nightmares…There was a monster under my bed.

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  19. Dear C.E.

    Now that’s taking ‘things that go bump in the night’ to a new level. Every child’s nightmare. And my closets are scary enough as you can see. 😉 Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  20. Iain Kelly says:

    I dread to think what Mummy has been keeping in her closet…

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  21. Sandra says:

    I shall tell myself that the rat is swinging on the door handle. I shall also tell myself that the rat is not quite strong enough to push the door open. I shall keep repeating this until his Mummy comes home. Spooky or what.

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  22. neilmacdon says:

    A juicy little chiller!

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