Gotcha – Sunday Photo Fiction

Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in the picture (below).
This week’s photo, again by the man himself, has only two elements, a phone and a carpet. I decided to be less obvious, and write about the carpet.
Pass the hoover, Al.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and to see what others have written.

© Al Forbes

Click here to hear the story read aloud by the author:

My eyes are fixed on the small boat.
It is anchored in a secluded cove, lying in the shadow of the ancient citadel, just a couple of kilometres west of St Tropez.
The sun is shining on the Mediterranean Sea, and on my hopes.
I study the boat for some time, struggling to suppress the smile playing around my lips.
I need definite confirmation.
There is no one on deck, and I cannot tell who is inside, but I am optimistic.
But never over-confident.
I see movement.
And there he is.
My grin is wide now.
I lay down the binoculars, reach for my phone.
One quick call.
One hundred thousand dollars.
Then I feel a distinctive pressure in the small of my back.

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13 Responses to Gotcha – Sunday Photo Fiction

  1. jwdwrites says:

    I never realised carpet smuggling was such a dangerous business! 😉


  2. Uh, oh. He was watching someone and someone was watching him but at closer range. It seems his criminal days–maybe all his days–are over. Good writing as always, C.E. 🙂 — Suzanne


  3. ePriceInfo says:

    Nice story!…


  4. mandibelle16 says:

    I very much like this, the ending especially. My first thought was that he was shot as the pressure was ‘distinctive’ but you leave it wide open to possibility. Hugs CE


  5. Mandie Hines says:

    Boy this story makes me want to know more. I agree with Kecia, excellent thriller.


  6. JS Brand says:

    Great surprise at the end.


  7. EagleAye says:

    Love the finish of this. The sun shined on his plans until that last moment.


  8. k rawson says:

    Nicely done. Love how you took the path less traveled by choosing the carpet over the phone.


  9. This was a real thriller, Ceayr.


  10. michael1148humphris says:

    Short and to the point. Bang


  11. Really good story CE. It’s always great to hear you read it as well. I tried recording myself reading one of my poems. Yeah, that won’t happen again lol.

    I wonder who it is to have such good security.


  12. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice little piece of intrigue in the sunshine.


  13. Yes. Excellent thriller.

    Liked by 1 person

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