Click here to hear the poet read his words:
clementine
sitting on the sand
listening to the sea
looking at the sky
eating a clementine
wishing
thinking of the past
contemplating the now
dreaming of the future
wishing
remembering your smile
missing your embrace
longing for your touch
aching at your loss
regretting oh so much
wishing
wishing things were different
wishing you were here
wishing you’d come back
just wishing
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Very haunting and sad. The repetition of wishing effectively adds to the somber mood.
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Thanks, Lindsey, I’m happy it worked for you.
I wasn’t sure about the repetition, but decided to go for it.
Your kind words make it all worthwhile.
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Lovely.
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Glad you liked, Trish
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Sad and beautiful in one.
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Thanks, Katrin, always a pleasure to have you visit
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Jenne has put it so well. A sublime and haunting piece.
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Very kind, Chris, much appreciated.
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Beautifully read and beautifully sad.
The heartache in the words and in the voice.
The structure of the ‘wishing’ at the end of each verse, building up to the repetition in the last verse, and the final ‘just wishing’ … it works so well in creating the mood.
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Thanks, Jenne, the ‘wishing’ was the bit I pondered over
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