Nocturne – Six Sentence Story

Artwork by Phil Burns

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – VIDEO

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Nocturne

I limp through the dark apartment back to my bedroom, cursing these nocturnal cramps that cause such discomfort to my legs.
Unsure if I have seen something move, I stare through the French windows that open onto my second-storey balcony overlooking the small residents’ car park behind the apartment block.
I lift my phone and step gingerly outside, immediately confirming that a shadow is skulking among the vehicles.
Intending to video the prowler, I instead take a photo, triggering the automatic flash which, of course, immediately alerts him to my presence.
As he turns his face towards me the moon appears through a sudden and unwelcome gap in the low clouds, and we see each other clearly.
My mind tumbles back through the years, and my heart freezes.

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About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered peace in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte Vermeille, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random. So, nobody’s perfect.
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33 Responses to Nocturne – Six Sentence Story

  1. This does not bode well methinks. Judging by Mr, B’s picture things are about to get a little troublesome!

  2. You must continue this! (please and thank you)

  3. Terveen Gill's avatar Terveen Gill says:

    So chilling!

  4. Liz H's avatar Liz H says:

    Dun dun Dah!! (cue evil laughter)

  5. What a suspense! Can’t wait to know what happens next, Ceayr!

  6. UP's avatar UP says:

    perfection

  7. jenne49's avatar jenne49 says:

    Jings, I’m on the edge of my seat here.
    Expertly set up with the ordinary events of life, and then…
    Excellent.

  8. Chris Hall's avatar Chris Hall says:

    Oh, the suspense… who can it be? Or what??

  9. It sounds like the start of a scary story!

  10. Most excellent, C.E. I can’t help but circle the werewolf angle (and having fun doing so!)
    Total visual on this. Very entertaining.

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      That wasn’t in my mind, Denise, but I guess I can see where you’re coming from.
      I’m always happy for my reader to imagine it in their own way.

  11. Romi's avatar Romi says:

    Suspense is building.

  12. Pat Brockett's avatar Pat Brockett says:

    I hope the nocturnal cramps don’t keep him from slipping quickly back into his apartment to safety. This looks like a story that has much more to be written. A bit Halloweenish with the potential to be even scarier if listened to in the dark of night. Well done.

  13. Nicely done and very hairy. Were it a wolf? 🙂

  14. Frank Hubeny's avatar Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice description of spotting a mysterious figure from the past. I like how the moon shone through an “unwelcome gap”.

  15. Oy that could be such exceptionally major trouble.

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