Nocturne – Six Sentence Story

Artwork by Phil Burns

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – VIDEO

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Nocturne

I limp through the dark apartment back to my bedroom, cursing these nocturnal cramps that cause such discomfort to my legs.
Unsure if I have seen something move, I stare through the French windows that open onto my second-storey balcony overlooking the small residents’ car park behind the apartment block.
I lift my phone and step gingerly outside, immediately confirming that a shadow is skulking among the vehicles.
Intending to video the prowler, I instead take a photo, triggering the automatic flash which, of course, immediately alerts him to my presence.
As he turns his face towards me the moon appears through a sudden and unwelcome gap in the low clouds, and we see each other clearly.
My mind tumbles back through the years, and my heart freezes.

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33 Responses to Nocturne – Six Sentence Story

  1. This does not bode well methinks. Judging by Mr, B’s picture things are about to get a little troublesome!

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  2. You must continue this! (please and thank you)

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  3. Liz H says:

    Dun dun Dah!! (cue evil laughter)

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  4. What a suspense! Can’t wait to know what happens next, Ceayr!

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  5. UP says:

    perfection

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  6. jenne49 says:

    Jings, I’m on the edge of my seat here.
    Expertly set up with the ordinary events of life, and then…
    Excellent.

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  7. Chris Hall says:

    Oh, the suspense… who can it be? Or what??

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  8. It sounds like the start of a scary story!

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  9. Most excellent, C.E. I can’t help but circle the werewolf angle (and having fun doing so!)
    Total visual on this. Very entertaining.

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  10. Romi says:

    Suspense is building.

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  11. Pat Brockett says:

    I hope the nocturnal cramps don’t keep him from slipping quickly back into his apartment to safety. This looks like a story that has much more to be written. A bit Halloweenish with the potential to be even scarier if listened to in the dark of night. Well done.

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  12. Nicely done and very hairy. Were it a wolf? 🙂

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  13. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice description of spotting a mysterious figure from the past. I like how the moon shone through an “unwelcome gap”.

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  14. Oy that could be such exceptionally major trouble.

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