Daddy – Sunday Photo Fiction

Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in his picture (below).
Parks have been, for many years, a major feature of my life.
I love a Dear Green Place.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and see what others have written.
Below is an example of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.

Copyright Al Forbes

Copyright Al Forbes


Oh Mummy, please stop squeezing me!
Yes, of course I’m pleased to see you.
And yes, I am happy to be home.
Yes, I had a good time with Daddy.
We went to the circus, and to the zoo, saw elephants and monkeys.
Oh, and snakes, yuk!
We went out on the loch in a little boat, saw lots of birds and swans and ducks.
And some deer on an island.
We went to the Science Centre, it has those mirrors that make you a funny shape, all skinny or really fat!
And there is a great park at Daddy’s new home, with swings and statues and everything, it is lovely.
And he has a little doggie called Cheeky, Daddy says he named it after me!
And Sarah says…
Daddy’s friend, she was there too.
Yes, she lives in Daddy’s new home too.
She is really nice, and funny as well.
She laughs a lot.
And she makes me laugh a lot.
She even makes Daddy laugh a lot.
He didn’t use to laugh at all, did he, Mummy?
Aren’t you glad I’m back?
Why are you crying?

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29 Responses to Daddy – Sunday Photo Fiction

  1. OnChi says:

    Oh gosh, I’m so glad Daddy’s happy. Poor Mommy, though 😦 Very nice bubbling dialog of a child!


  2. Sightsnbytes says:

    The innocence of a child is reflected in your story. Very moving and touching.


  3. Francesca Smith says:

    You captured a child’s innocence very well in so few words. The truth can be brutal.
    Great take on the photo.


  4. EagleAye says:

    Oh so sad for the mother, to hear this so innocently told by the son. It’s great the way you played that out so slowly. Great story!


  5. Danny James says:

    Now that is sad!



  6. Donna says:

    Children say the truest things…


  7. I could hear the conversation and sense the pain. Sad yet delightful.

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  8. Belinda Crane says:

    You’ve captured the innocence of a child beautifully. Loved this piece.


  9. Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
    AnElephantCant go out at night
    Mummy says he can’t play in the dark
    So he has to stay quite
    Well-behaved till daylight
    To see if Daddy takes him to the park

    Liked by 1 person

  10. You captured the “chatter” of a young boy wonderfully! Great story!


  11. Such a sweet and painful story. Kids don’t know what they say sometimes, they just say what they see without knowing the consequences. Great story


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