AnElephantCant be a swashbuckling hero
He’s too afraid of Styx and stones
If the sea is too deep
He prefers not to leap
In case he ends up in the Locker of Davy Jones
Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Where our admirable Admiral Rochelle leads her crew of scribes into a fleet, nay, a veritable armada of fishy tales.
And AnAmphibiousElephant splashes around in the shallow end.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.
Copyright – Ted Strutz
The Raft
She begs him not to swim out today.
He insists, to the consternation of his friends.
What a shower of wimps, he laughs, plunging into the high waves.
They see him clamber onto the swaying raft, perhaps 80 metres from the beach, and wave to him in relief.
He dives off the far side, and is not seen again.
The emergency services and coastguard can find no trace of his body.
Currents, they explain, and a deep trench.
She smiles across the table of the luxury liner at the man she loves.
I guess the scuba equipment worked okay, darling?
This is simply superbly crafted -loved the intrigue and the twist at the end-a pleasant one;-)
Thank you, dear lady.
AnElephant thrills to your praise.
🙂
I’m left wondering if it’s the same “she”, elephant. intruiging indeed
Dear lady, AnElephanCant be so fickle as to have more than 1 ‘she’ in 100 words!
Elaborate plotting to provide her freedom. I expect money was the reason. Nicely told tale, Sir Elephant.
Thank you, Erin, your visit and comments are much appreciated.
Glad you enjoyed.
Oooooh. Now that was sneaky. Love the twist at the end!
AnElephant enjoys sneaky!
And praise from lovely ladies.
Thank you.
I won’t be sneaky and I’ll comment as a lady friend…cheers to you!
AnElephant is all huge heffelump smiles now.
😀 the ladies do too!
Terriffic! I love second chance and do overs. There is a thriller in that story…
It’s close to midnight and something evil’s lurking in the dark – gosh, you are right, Emmy – ‘Cause this is thriller!
very clever 🙂
Thanks, kz, glad you liked it.
Creepy but exciting tone. Excellent Anelephantcant 🙂
Thank you, dear lady, much appreciated.
It seems to be about death and murder this week… What a scary fellow AnElephant is! If I were a man, I would stay clear of the water; that’s for sure! Well done.
AnElephant heard you the first time!
For some reason, my comments didn’t appear to be posting yesterday, but for some (lucky) folks, they ended up being duplicated. Just shows my dedication that I wrote them twice. AnElephant should enjoy the love. 😉
AnElephant relishes and revels in affection from beautiful ladies!
And this lady blushes.
Seems we all went with death this week… death and murder! Scary wives; I’m not sure I’d be in the water if I was a husband! Well done.
No death here, dear lady, he just disappeared.
Thank you for visiting.
Wait….I am not sure what to do with my tally. It feels so incomplete not to add a mark.
Bang!
There you go, add yourself.
Good one! I am currently watching a lot of “Bones.” She would love solving this one if they could find the body.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/11/27/ff-friday-fictioneers-the-restaurant-at-the-end-pg13-11292013-horror/
Thanks for visiting, Scott, but no body to find.
Scuba equipment, yes?
I know – TV would have to improvise.
As long as she can play the grieving widow realistically enough, this seems like a foolproof plan…until chapter two when the police inspector happens to be on the same boat as them. 🙂
Chapter two in zero words?
Not much going to happen!
Very creative! A twisting tale of disappearance 🙂
A happy heffelump who reads kind words from Jan.
Thank you, much appreciated.
Naughty elephant! Scheming and dabbling in danger. Otherwise…perfect!
AnElephant is merely the teller, not the protagonist!
And thank you for very kind words.
Fabulous twist.
Thank you!
So happy you liked it.
They’ll get away with it, unless we’re talking Alfred Hitchcock Presents. Well-told, Elephant!
Thanks, Perry, praise always welcome here!
A scam is always great… wonderful
Thanks, Bjorn, good of you to take the time to visit and comment.
Much appreciated.
Methinks they’d best check out that mustachioed man skulking behind the nearby pillar–he has insurance investigator written all over him.
But, sadly for him, there are no more words!
Thanks for your comment.
I hope they get away with it. I think they will. Nice one.
A touch of the rebel there, Sandra!
Glad you enjoyed.
Life insurance comes in handy sometimes, especially if you can claim it (and even enjoy it!) while still alive. I like the twist in your tale.
Thanks, Mike, happy you liked it.
Dear AEC,
Long swim submerged but worth it, I’m figuring. Starting over is much better than suicide or death by stagnation.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you, Doug, sometimes walking away is the best option.
Especially if ‘she’ comes too.
Guess he should have listened and not gone in the water. That’ll show him! He’ll never make that mistake, or any other, again.
AnElephant suspects you missed the point here, Adam.
But thanks for visiting.
No, I got the point. I was just making a joke.
Much better than a messy divorce!
No divorce required, ‘She’ is same woman.
Fantastic tale of double indemnity in reverse. Totally surprised me.
Yes, big surprise that AnElephant did not kill anyone this week.
Maybe he is getting soft?
A modern day Reggie Perrin? Good story Elephant. 🙂
Wow, long memory there!
But yes, although clearly she is in on it this time.
Thank you.
Oh very good 😀 Get rid of one life to start another. Fantastic
Yep, a well planned escape for them.
Thanks, Al, glad you liked it.
I’m always amazed at how quickly you manage to create an excellent piece like that 🙂
Dear Elephant,
Oh the duplicity! Bad one, but in a good way I liked this.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Sometimes, dear lady, needs must!
Glad you enjoyed.
As I suspected as I read thru Sir elephant, there’s a twist in this elephants trunk, and I was right. Good one mate.
Thank you, Sir ST2, good to see you here again.
Still celebrating, are we?
Till the next one begins at least. Thank you we need all the support we can get.
That’s one way to start from scratch. Which begs the question what was he running from?
Only got 100 words, and Rochelle batters AnElephant with a barely boiled bean if he overruns!
Indeed. So I am left to fill in the blanks using my own imagination. Dangerous business.