AnElephantCant tell you how grateful he is
You guys support him while he is in transit
When his travels are done
He will visit each one
He promises this is how he plans it
Yup, it is Friday Fictioneer time again.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.
Copyright Managua Gunn
The Sentry
Jimmy had the best job in the world.
Chief of security for King Shuggie XVI of Comfortania, a tiny, picturesque and ridiculously wealthy country on the River Danube.
Everyone loved Shuggie, inside and outside the kingdom.
And yet he was poisoned.
Everyone blamed the Hungarians or the Austrians, of course.
Queen Senga, young, beautiful and very intelligent, had publicly berated poor Jimmy, and demoted him to sentry duty for 12 months.
Which would be up in a couple of weeks, and Jimmy would once again be responsible for the care of the Royal Person.
The lovers’ plan had worked perfectly.
Sound Bite Fiction 
You use language so very well, love it.
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I was not expecting that ending either, which is a credit to your writing. A very evil twist.
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Palace intrigue at its finest. Poor Shuggie.
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All the right ingredients and wonderfully crafted. 🙂
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Shuggie and Senga hmm, I’m sure there is an anagram there but I can’t see it…
Well done.
keep safe on your travels
Dee
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Just very trunk-in-cheek Scottish names!
Thank you for kind wishes.
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Queen Senga!! I never did trust her. Great little tale which probably contains a modicum of some truth somewhere, sometime.
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Yes, love the twist!
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/06/20/friday-fictioneers-62113-romantic-fiction-pg13/
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I wonder which one of them came up with this cunning plan. Methinks it has a woman’s touch. Very well told with that unforeseen ending.
Hope the move is going well.
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Trés bien — would the elephant be named Babar now?
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I can’t add to what’s already been said. They all said it well (excepting perhaps the corrections part, lol) How fun. Loved it! 🙂
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Beautifully imaginative – France is suiting you …
Loved this idea
Chief of security for King Shuggie XVI of Comfortania, a tiny, picturesque and ridiculously wealthy country on the River Danube.
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an elephant can and certainly did come up with great tale.. 🙂
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Ah brilliant! Romantic intrigue, and I love the creation of an imaginary nation. One that fits the picture perfectly. Most well met, good sir.
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Dear Elephant,
I know the vamp story is not your thing…so maybe you’d like some entertaining bits on Dragons?
http://julesinflashyfiction.wordpress.com/norgard-a-dragon-tale/
Nice to see that you got to visit your pal, Al
If you’re ever in the States…
I’d be happy to set you some plates…
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What fun, except for the king, of course. 🙂 My only quibble is that the way this is written, it makes it sound as though Jimmy was poisoned:
“Chief of security for King Shuggie XVI of Comfortania, a tiny, picturesque and ridiculously wealthy country on the River Danube.
Everyone loved him, inside and outside the kingdom.
And yet he was poisoned.”
Maybe “Everyone loved the king…” and then, if you need one less word, “Yet he was poisoned.”
Other than that, loved it, safe travels/unpacking/moving in/etc. 🙂
janet
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Sorry, one update got lost sur l’autoroute!
Had noticed that and corrected.
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Devious.
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smart, but not so faithful queen. Btw, Comfortania sounds like a great place to reside:)
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Interesting tale, Elephant Person~!
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Yes! Fun, fun, fun! Like The Mouse That Roared. Congratulations!
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Dear Elephant,
Ooh. Ouch! You’ve aimed your poison dart and it hit its mark. Well done. Enjoy your travels and thanks for taking time to contribute.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I like the ending too! Excellent!
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Excellent twist. Poison her husband so they can be together … Brilliant.
AnElephant has done it again
Writing has become his addiction
His posts are sublime
Each has a rhyme
Whether the post is fact or fiction
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Don’t worry about us
Just have fun
And enjoy
Your
Travels
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Only thing that could do with wiggling is to make it clearer who got poisoned. If one assumes it was Jimmy then some cogs start slipping at the end until one readjusts …
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Sorry, one update got lost sur l’autoroute!
Had noticed that and corrected.
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I didn’t see that coming! Great twist ending.
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