Home – Six Sentence Story

Copyright C. E. Ayr

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – KEY

Click here to hear the author read his words:


I pause outside, just for a moment, as I do more and more frequently these days.

Peering through the window, I can see my wife and children doing the things that families do, laughing, clowning around, having fun, looking happy.

I feel a surprisingly warm glow inside because I know they are not always like this, that very often they are sad.

My wife, especially, reflects on what has happened, on what might have been, on what she clearly hopes might yet be again.

When I turn my key and step inside, the laughter stops, and the kids slip silently away to their rooms.

My wife smiles bravely, as she always does, and asks ‘How was your day, dear?’.

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36 Responses to Home – Six Sentence Story

  1. Liz H says:

    I feel chilled. The kids know what’s to come…


  2. Tom says:

    There’s definitely fear there, CE, but it looks like he wants change. Can it happen?


  3. Will they or won’t they? What would it take? Is it possible? What would be best for the children?
    A most poignant, well written Six, CE. Wow.


  4. Ghostly and sad. A lot of pain inside those four walls. Good one CE.


  5. Gr8BigFun says:

    I can feel the protagonists sadness as I read through the piece. Nice six.


  6. Staarlz says:

    This is a heart-grabber, the pain is palpable. Well done story.


  7. UP says:

    “Damaged men with damaged wives… so, so many

    Liked by 1 person

  8. Chris Hall says:

    “Damaged men with damaged wives…” I can feel the hurt in those sentences.


  9. clark says:

    Had me thinking ‘Ah! A ghost story’
    … worse, a story that can’t, for those entrapped, be awoken from, relieved that it was ‘only a dream


  10. A family living two lives. Sad.


  11. jenne49 says:

    Expertly crafted story right from a fleeting hint of something that clashes in the first sentence through the happy family scenes to the mounting tension and the menace at the end.
    A wee masterpiece.

    Liked by 2 people

  12. It is so hard to be in a situation as such. Both, being the child/wife and the husband. I hope they will recover.


  13. Maybe there’s a chance he can change his ways, if he can see the situation as it is. This was a cool Six, I felt the tension and wasn’t sure how it was going to end. Well done.


  14. It’s so hard to live in such a family, hard to keep that hope alive.


  15. The bogey man cometh. Excellent piece, CE.


  16. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice description. I hope the family recovers.


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