Young Love – Six Sentence Story

Artwork by Phil Burns

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – RAMBUNCTIOUS

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Young Love

My mother, who must have ears like a hawk, intercepts us as I hustle Carole Kay towards the stairs leading to my room.

Carole is a pretty girl, popular with all the lads, very easy-going and rumoured to be, in private, even a tad rambunctious.

And where, asks my mum, with a surprising lack of insight, do you think you are going?

I er um we em thought erm ah going to listen to some music! I answer smoothly.

Well, says mater, seemingly determined that I should remain innocent until I am at least 30, I don’t want anything, ahem, bad going on up there.

Oh no, Mrs Ayr, you don’t need to worry about that, says Carole, with the most beatific smile, dragging me by the hand up the first few steps, I promise you I’ll be very, very good.

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About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered peace in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte Vermeille, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random. So, nobody’s perfect.
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29 Responses to Young Love – Six Sentence Story

  1. Coincidence, CE? 😉 Take the “e” from her first name, tack it on to her last name…
    Humorous and entertaining!

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      Pure coincidence, Denise, the Carole in my story is based on an old friend.
      And I’d never malign a lady I don’t know personally.
      Glad you enjoyed.

  2. Liz H's avatar Liz H says:

    Mother not quite as unaware as might seem, but she knows when the scales have tipped.
    Carole leads the initiate…

  3. Mothers need those good ears.

  4. Pat Brockett's avatar Pat Brockett says:

    Mrs. Ayr is on to those two, me thinks.

  5. Frank Hubeny's avatar Frank Hubeny says:

    Carole’s assurance of being “very, very good” probably worries the mother even more. Regardless mother knows best.

  6. ladysighs's avatar ladysighs says:

    Something suspicious about a Carol who spells her name with an E-asy.

  7. Reena Saxena's avatar Reena Saxena says:

    And did she believe Carole?

  8. Chris Hall's avatar Chris Hall says:

    I’m with Jenne on this! Is it hot in here, or is it me?😳

  9. Mum’s good v Carole’s good, I bet I know what you opted for!

  10. UP's avatar UP says:

    Greaet six.

  11. ‘Carole is a pretty girl, popular with all the lads, very easy-going and rumoured to be, in private, even a tad rambunctious.’ Not the word that would have been used when I was a lad. 😉

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      Confession time, Doug.
      I’ve never heard the word before in my life, and don’t know what it means.
      I think it’s probably a made-up American word, possibly a brutal misspelling of ‘rumbustious’!

  12. jenne49's avatar jenne49 says:

    Now that made me laugh.
    I can see us all smiling and blushing from having been either the teenage boy or girl in the story.
    Topped off by a magnificent last line.

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