The Jetty – Carrot Ranch

Copyright C. E. Ayr

The Carrot Ranch Challenge:
In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story inspired by “WHISPERS”.

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The Jetty

The rock-built jetty is so peaceful in winter, just the lapping of the waves, the whispers of the wind.
It is different in summertime.
Although few sun-seekers venture out here from the beach, the sounds drift.
Children laughing or wailing, boys arguing over ball games, girls squealing in mock surprise, I hear everything.
Occasionally a youngster clambers out to explore, usually with Dad, sometimes with a friend.
And shrieks with excitement at the clusters of crabs, or voracious fish, that can be seen down crevices, feeding in unlikely places.
Then I smile to myself.
Because only I know why.

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12 Responses to The Jetty – Carrot Ranch

  1. I love how you added that twist at the end. The piece is complete without it, but the twist managed to add another, deeper layer in only five simple words. I’m sure it made many of us think! You’ve created warmth in this character, their admiration and kind gesture shines through. I hope more children and adults alike get to enjoy his thriving creation while the season lasts. Fabulous imagery C. An inspiring and uplifting take on the prompt.

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  2. A mysterious ending that leads my imagination to whoever it was that put those rocks into such positions as to create their own feeding pond.

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  4. Charli Mills says:

    The imagery unfolds, the narrator an open book until the end, leaving a mystery each reader could imagine.

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  5. jenne49 says:

    There was something about, ‘I hear everything’ in among the joyful descriptions, something about this lone watcher.
    Just a hint… that came powerfully to fruition in the last two unexpected lines.
    Excellent build up and twist.

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  6. Oh, wicked ending! Some body is feeding the crabs!

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  7. Lindsey Stewart says:

    A wonderful descriptive piece which had me basking in the simple delights of an 8 year old. Then the wee twist at the end … I want to know why!

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