Smitten – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by the delightful but limping Susan Eames.

© Susan Eames

Click here to hear the author read his words:


Here she comes, punctual as ever.
I love watching her walk, her movement is almost languid, but she covers the ground quickly.
She makes me think of a gazelle, or maybe even a panther.
Her figure is slender but shapely in her nurse’s uniform.
And her smile as she approaches makes my heart leap.
Her eyes sparkle, her lips are slightly parted, she glows with the joy of being alive.
I feel the same today as I did the first time I saw her.
Utterly smitten, and happy just to be in the same world.
Tomorrow, definitely, I’ll say hello.

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41 Responses to Smitten – Friday Fictioneers

  1. James McEwan says:

    A well told event of smitten love. I am in two minds about this, her presence makes him fell good and is an aid to recovery, however if he gets better he will have to leave her company. Best say hello before its too late.


  2. writelindy says:

    I love your take on this particularly as I used to be a nurse.


  3. michael says:

    Tomorrow will be to late, nurses are in high demand


  4. notestowomen says:

    I kept expecting something sinister to happen and was relieved when it didn’t. Sweet story, CE 🙂


  5. draliman says:

    I bet he won’t.
    For some reason I was expecting him to bring her back to his lovely cellar/dungeon…


  6. He sounds like a happy man. Hopefully when he takes that next step he won’t be disappointed


  7. pennygadd51 says:

    I’m going to read that straight. It’s a sweet love story. It IS a sweet love story. He is not a serial killer. It’s a sweet love story with no hint of murder, strangling or shooting or…
    I enjoyed your sweet love story, CE!


  8. Awwww, he’s smitten indeed! I hope he’s the KIND sort and not the perp sort … but somehow I’m not that sure anymore … 😉


  9. Is there evil lurking around somewhere in this sweet tale? I wish it were no so. For once, give us a beautiful love story, please Ceayr. What a lovely read, in any case?


  10. jwdwrites says:

    Ah, unrequited love. Bet he chickens out!


  11. It worries me that you seem to be getting all gooey-eyed. Are you okay?


  12. granonine says:

    Aww. A gooey love story from YOU, CE? Surely something else is afoot.


  13. Anita says:

    Happy sweet story 🙂
    What happens after he says hello?
    Is she married?


  14. Tannille says:

    Awww… almost worth breaking a leg for.


  15. Bittersweet story. Lovely read.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos


  16. Dear CE,

    Such a tender story. It makes me smile.




  17. Iain Kelly says:

    He’ll be disappointed when the doctor discharges him during afternoon rounds.


  18. Sandra says:

    I kept waiting for the other shoe to drop, as they say. A lovely story.


  19. I hope he / she doesn’t break another leg just to be with her 😉


  20. neilmacdon says:

    If I didn’t know your work better, I’d be tempted to say that was sweet


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