The Heron – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by
the lady herself.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields


Click here to hear the author read his words:

The Heron

Hello George, he says.
I scowl at him, my name is not George.
No one here knows my name but, back where I come from, they call me The Heron.
Because I wait patiently until it’s time to strike.
He laughs.
Maybe you prefer Mildred, he sneers.
I offer a handshake, pull him slightly off balance.
My left fist hits him hard in the solar plexus.
He doubles over, gasping for breath.
I catch his collar, throw him head-first through a doorway.
That was my mother’s name, I say.
Actually she was called Janet.
I just don’t like this guy.

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59 Responses to The Heron – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Love the action. It’s hard to make a fight “work” in writing and you did it here with an incredible efficiency.

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  2. robprice59 says:

    I don’t like him either! Good piece.

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  3. I’m so glad you wrote something about the heron. There are loads of them in our neck of the woods and they are patient creatures, waiting to strike. Nicely done.

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  4. With that ominous beginning, I had a feeling something bad was about to happen to the other guy. Nicely done, and I really enjoy listening to the audio. Take care!

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  5. James McEwan says:

    A man who makes very few friends, how long will he last?

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  6. draliman says:

    I don’t like “this guy” either. He was asking for a rumble.

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  7. subroto says:

    Wow! Heron is such an angry bird.

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  8. I liked that, but i’d better be careful when I meet the Heron, wouldn’t want to get on his bad side… I like to listen to the voice recording too, my varifocals are playing up!

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  9. I’ll have to be careful what I say when commenting in future Doris!

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  10. Bill says:

    Nailed it, CE. Well done (Bill reaches to shake your hand). Nice to hear you again too. 🙂

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  11. Sue says:

    It seems The Heron is in a bit of a kerfuffle, but has taken the upper hand! Great story 🙂

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  12. trishsplace says:

    Laughed out loud! Or snorted, more like. Good job.

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  13. pennygadd51 says:

    As so often, your story made me smile. I’m with Neil – those last two lines are masterly!

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  14. Nobbinmaug says:

    I think George has a short fuse. … I mean The Heron. I said, ‘The Heron.’

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  15. Dora says:

    So good, Iain. Swift justice or vengeance? Tough guy, The Heron.

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  16. Iain Kelly says:

    We have a Heron that comes back to the small local loch each year and stands a round a lot. Never thought of him as a violent predator, but then I never call him names.

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  17. Liz Young says:

    Oh dear – you are in a violent mood today!

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  18. Sandra says:

    George and Mildred… memory lane. Your narrator sounds a tad world-weary. And certainly uncompromising, in a comical sort of way. Well done.

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  19. granonine says:

    The guy was NOT likable! His attitude just begged for someone to slug him 🙂

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  20. No one messes with the Heron.

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  21. Dear CE,

    You left me laughing. Personally, I think the guy had it coming. Brilliant last line. 😀

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  22. Mike says:

    Such handshakes are not on these days Mr Heron😊

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  23. Reena Saxena says:

    Well…. the guy didn’t know you are Heron 🙂

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  24. neilmacdon says:

    Lovely last two lines

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