Sand Storm – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s photo is by the ultra-talented Sandra Crook,  and portrays an intriguing gizmo.
To the less technically aware among you, that is a thingummyjig.
My tale tells of wondrous wodjacallems.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture, below.


© Sandra Crook

Sand Storm
Her behaviour catches my eye as much as her looks.
She talks softly to herself as she draws images in the sand.
I am old, but not totally immune to the charms of a pretty girl on the beach.
I watch her, discreetly, for some time.
Then I adopt my friendly elderly gent persona, and approach.
She answers with a smile.
I am casting a spell to steal a soul, she tells me.
Is it working, I laugh.
She scratches a shape between us, then makes a swirling gesture with her hand.
We whirl away in a vast sand storm.

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72 Responses to Sand Storm – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Lori Carlson says:

    Wow, great story! I love the ending, totally unexpected.


  2. Good story, C.E. Not being an elderly man but an elderly woman, I see this story differently. On the other hand, maybe she isn’t interested in women, elderly or otherwise. From reading fairy tales, I seem to remember some old magical women making themselves young. Let’s hope it has a happy ending. Well written and truly magical. 🙂 — Suzanne


    • ceayr says:

      I suspect, Suzanne, that your view might be close to the author’s intent.
      Happy ending doubtful.
      But I really enjoy that so many people interpret the words so differently.


  3. Margaret says:

    Wonderfully romantic and fanciful. I love it.


  4. Love this so much, those pretty girl’s at it again 😉


  5. “Beware adopting the ‘friendly elderly gent persona’ one time too many,” she cautions, “Or you’ll be whirled away in a great story.”


  6. erinleary says:

    Oooh…powerful story of magic and surrender. It sounds to me like this old gent is going to be perfectly happy being taken away by the lovely lass.


  7. kathyd65 says:

    Beware the smile of a pretty, young woman. I liked your tale and the twist at the end.


  8. Amy Reese says:

    Bewitching and intriguing! I think, whatever she did, it worked.


  9. gahlearner says:

    I think he is bewitched. Maybe she is worth his soul, but I doubt it. Romance with a sinister twist, why am I not surprised?


  10. Dee says:

    Loved this take on the prompt and your ingenious way of using the sand… Magical, well written , you do this so well CE


  11. oldentimes says:

    EXCELLENT! spinning and dancing off forever


  12. rgayer55 says:

    I’ll have to try that nice, elderly gent persona. What a way to go.


  13. Dale says:

    Ahhh… m’sieur Ayr… methinks your soft side is creeping out more often. Some may see a sinister undertone, I dinna… I see a lovely older gent allowing a pretty young thing to seduce him and let him feel alive. I may be out on a limb on this one… but I care not!


  14. plaridel says:

    i could only imagine what happened next after the dust …er, sand settled. 🙂


  15. Jan Brown says:

    That was a great twist, but I’m not sure she had to steal his soul. She already had his heart (or at least his libido).


  16. mjlstories says:

    Last week a skirl and this a whirl and a swirl. What a way to go!


  17. emmylgant says:

    Well done. And I am at a loss for words.


  18. liz young says:

    Poor old chap – susceptible to the end!


  19. jellico84 says:

    Enjoyed that little swirl! 🙂


  20. Judee says:

    Fascinating tale, I enjoyed this! As for thingamagiggies, got lots of those, lol! Not quite as many wotchamacllits though, I find they are a bit more rare. 😉


  21. Carolyn Page says:

    Ooh, that was surprising. I’m still swirling. 😉
    That must be a good compliment…!


  22. Nice twist, but I think I’d like to whirl away with her anywhere she wants!


  23. mandibelle16 says:

    Good one. He thought he was going to be able to put on ‘elderly gent persona,’ and she only wanted his soul. What a scary young woman.


  24. I had a feeling he was really a bad old man… but it seems he met his fate… But I might be wrong.. Love how you picked up on the sand only.


  25. Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
    AnElephantCant be interested in this stuff
    Although he loves the photo by sweet Sandra Crook
    But he does not care
    About C E Ayr
    He just wants to show off his super new look!

    Liked by 2 people

  26. Oh, what a creative story! Very magical, and scary, too! Love the characterization of that old man! 🙂


  27. Sandra says:

    Full of magical potential, with a little undercurrent of dread running through this. You do this so well.


  28. That last line portrays such a visual image. I want to whirl!


  29. Magical, beautiful…the words are dancing. Nicely done!


  30. Beautiful, you old romantic, you.


  31. Dear C.E.

    She certainly stole his soul didn’t she? What a way to go. 😉 Imaginative and clever. I’m never disappointed. And thank you for explaining the gizmo thingamagiggy.




    • ceayr says:

      Ah figgered sum yo purty lal fangs don’ know too much ’bout this kinda stuff, probly can’t tell a wathefuffzat from a hoojikipiv, too busy keepin’ y’alls hair nice.

      Never disappointed?
      If only life was like that…

      Liked by 3 people

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