Love Letter

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s prompt by Erin Leary is a beautifully serene view of tranquil waters.
It took me to a very unusual place in my head.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture, below.

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Copyright Erin Leary

Love Letter

You know that, for me, it was love at first sight.
You remember all the good times, every day trip, every town, every lake, every beach, we ever visited.
You remember when we saw the fish dancing, and the eagles singing, and the beaver gnawing on the branch.
You remember the names of people I introduced you to a year ago in the little café in the square.
You remember that I asked you to marry me.
I know this, because you forget nothing.
Do you really have so much love in your life that you can discard mine so casually?

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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64 Responses to Love Letter

  1. erinleary says:

    We all walk around carrying so much inside. This is a peek inside and it was really well done.

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  2. subroto says:

    The change in the emotional tone was done so skilfully. Very well done indeed.

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  3. Now that taps a nerve.

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  4. Such a sense of loss and distance, here C. E. Lots of emotional depth.

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  5. An interesting take on the photo, and a lovely tale…til that last line. Well done as always. Wonder if they got back together?

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  6. Love … is it painful or is it wondrous? Ahhh … to love and be loved in returned … or maybe, not.
    I believe there’s a Ying and Yang going on in your story. And … one could say love is a many
    splendid thing … or … NOT !!!! Very thought provoking, Ceayr.
    Isadora 😎

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  7. mjlstories says:

    This is quite a departure, a different road. Mayhem of the heart. I am still pondering its many implications.

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  8. maria says:

    Aww, this beautiful sad piece. 😦

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  9. jademwong says:

    Oof, that last line. I love that you phrased it as a question and used the second-person point of view. That last line does to the reader because of the way. Personally, I was taken aback (in a good way) and really mulled over that question in relation to my life. Really well done.

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  10. You’ve been quite sentimental lately. I like it but I’m always wondering what happens next. “Will he kill her and bury her in the swamp?” Your writing keeps me guessing.

    Tracey@WWW.WhatsForDinnerDoc.Com

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  11. ansumani says:

    Reading this after Sandra’s story “Lily’s Pond”, it seems that you MC is better off pining for unrequited love rather than be fish food in the Lily pond.

    Nicely written.

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  12. athling2001 says:

    So sad for the narrator. Well written to convey his/her emotions.

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  13. gahlearner says:

    I had to read it twice, and am still not certain. To me, the line, “I know this because you forget nothing” is significant. Sometimes we don’t (want to) see the bad memories. Seeing the same things also doesn’t necessarily mean feeling the same things. It’s always sad when dreams are shattered. Interesting that the title is ‘love letter’. This could easily turn into something not sweet. I’m probably reading far too much into it, great story-bite as always.

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    • ceayr says:

      GaH, I adore you.
      Your comment is almost as long as my story, and probably contains even more emotional turmoil.
      I love it when an intelligent reader gets so involved, it makes everything worthwhile.
      Especially this week, when I got way out of my safety zone.
      Thank you.

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  14. I have to say that the end caught me by surprise… so skillfully you made a response to a dear John letter… (which I guess ended: It’s not you, it’s me, I hope we can still be friends).

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  15. Sad and surprising, but true to life. What is so special to one is just another day to another. And yet better she tell him now. Well written, as usual.

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  16. Margaret says:

    So sad. They’ve obviously shared so many intimate and beautiful moments. What a blow to have them all mean nothing to the other person. Wonderful structure in your story, and the repetition is very good.

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  17. luckyjc007 says:

    Very emotional and so sad for him. Maybe he loved her so much it clouded the fact that she really did not feel the same way about him. I wasn’t prepared for the ending of this story. Well written.

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  18. Joy Pixley says:

    Powerful and sad and real. I like how the idea of “you remember” shifts so subtly from sweet to almost an accusation with the last two lines.

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  19. You remember when we saw the fish dancing ~ love this line

    You build what seems to be a lifetime of love into a few lines, then smash the idea so completely.

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  20. paulmclem says:

    Oh dear, hopefully this isn’t autobiographical.

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    • ceayr says:

      I have just taken an overdose of painkillers, hanged and stabbed myself, and I plan to throw myself out of this sixth floor window in front of a bus.
      But no, of course not.

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  21. mandibelle16 says:

    Sometimes love is one sided. Maybe she didn’t realize the importance of what was happening for him. But then maybe she is just callous. Hard to say. Great job as always!

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  22. I wonder if it he who has the memories; perhaps she noticed nothing.

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  23. Graham Lawrence says:

    What a great last line. The others lead up to it majestically. Great story.

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  24. The Voice says:

    The last line is one I have uttered myself. Heartbreaking and well done.

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  25. A lover scorned….it can be a very dangerous thing. Hope his letter was strictly therapeutic. Intense story, my friend.

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  26. Dale says:

    Nothing worse than unrequited love… Lots of emotion in there!

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  27. Sandra says:

    A change from your usual genre, but a very strong and plaintive voice in this. Really good job. And the answer is … none of us do.

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  28. Dear CE,

    Uplifting and sweet…until the end. I feel very sad for him and a little angry at her. Good job of evoking so much emotion in few words.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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