Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in his picture (below).
This week’s hi-tech vision is a work of art.
As is Al’s superb description which, of course, I totally ignore.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and see what others have written.
Copyright Al Forbes
Elegance
I see her coming towards me, smile wide, arms wider.
Man, she walks beautifully.
We embrace, briefly, exchange a modest kiss.
I open the passenger door of the 911 Carrera Cabriolet, watch her slide in.
I do this partly because I am a gentleman, partly because she moves with such elegance, such class.
I clamber over the driver’s door, pretending to be cool and macho.
She laughs, slaps my arm.
We drive down the scenic coast road, towards her favourite restaurant.
I drink her in, perhaps for a split second too long.
The oncoming car drifts on the bend, I am too slow to react.
When my head clears, she looks less elegant.
Her head cannot be at that angle.
I start to scream…
Beep, beep, beep.
The machine feeds me more drugs.
I see her coming towards me, smile wide…
Very sad ending to this beautiful story. Liked the last line. Amazing how well you all write.
Very powerful! I see it as a car accident. He’s in the hospital getting drugs and she has died. Wonderful story!
Indeed, Joy, you have it exactly right.
Very glad you enjoyed.
Thank you CEAyr! It was a wonderful story!!
Awful ending to such a promising story. I can see how the image of her broken neck would replay in his nightmares. Not a nice thing to see at all, especially since he cared for her. Thank goodness for the drugs. Great story!
Thank you, Mandibelle.
I do appreciate that you always take time to visit, read, enjoy and comment.
Your summation is spot on.
Thanks so much. I enjoy your stories.
Noooooooooooooo! I was there with them, like watching a movie, enjoying the lovely exchange between them. Poor guy having to relive that moment over and over… Well done, Sir! xo
Yeeeeesssss!
I am very happy that you related so closely to the words, my dear Dale.
And that they had such an impact.
Most definitely.
Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
AnElephantCant use delicate doodahs
To let him near this is a catastrophic mistake
It is bound to break
Causing all sorts of heartache
AnElephant on his best behaviour still has the impact of a major earthquake
I agree with everybody else about the loop being absolutely amazing 🙂
How very kind of you, Angie, glad it worked so well.
Ouch. Nicely done.
Ally
Thank you, Ally.
Sorry about the ouch!
pure elegance, love it!
I bow with swept hat, ma’am!
Thank you.
A very enjoyable read! I love how you described his “trip” and brought him back to reality.
You are once again very kind, JC.
I am happy you enjoyed this so much.
I love stories that go in circles like this … fascinating and not a little scary, but wow, really great!
I love comments that are so enthusiastic!
Thank you, Georgia.
Very welcome … fun being able to be enthusiastic 🙂
She walks like a dream and he wakes up to a nightmare. .. well done.
For me the details build the story: the way he pretends, the way she slaps his arm…. and off I go, taken on a longer/other tale.
I love the way you do that.
The devil is in the detail, they say, so the story hits harder if you feel for the characters.
Merci, Em, toujours les mots gentils.
Fantastic! I love the way you did that. I love your unseen twists.
Thanks, Al, and what an intriguing little gizmo your present is.
It’s awesome. I’ve been after them since I saw them in a shop a couple of years ago. I nearly brought myself some just before Christmas, but the box was damaged – and my sister breathed a sigh of relief lol
Dear CE,
Once more you’ve twisted a plot and left me mouth agape. First I thought it was a car accident. Looping the story is effective. Well done. .
Shalom
Rochelle
And now, m’lady, as ever you do not know what to think!
My job is done here.
I love the repeat of the first line at the end, but with a completely different meaning. Excellent!
Thank you, Steve, I am delighted that this had the desired impact.
Love the way the story loops back on itself with the last line!
Glad it worked for you, Martin.