Elegance – Sunday Photo Fiction

Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in his picture (below).
This week’s hi-tech vision is a work of art.
As is Al’s superb description which, of course, I totally ignore.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and see what others have written.

Copyright Al Forbes

Copyright Al Forbes


I see her coming towards me, smile wide, arms wider.
Man, she walks beautifully.
We embrace, briefly, exchange a modest kiss.
I open the passenger door of the 911 Carrera Cabriolet, watch her slide in.
I do this partly because I am a gentleman, partly because she moves with such elegance, such class.
I clamber over the driver’s door, pretending to be cool and macho.
She laughs, slaps my arm.
We drive down the scenic coast road, towards her favourite restaurant.
I drink her in, perhaps for a split second too long.
The oncoming car drifts on the bend, I am too slow to react.
When my head clears, she looks less elegant.
Her head cannot be at that angle.
I start to scream…
Beep, beep, beep.
The machine feeds me more drugs.
I see her coming towards me, smile wide…

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33 Responses to Elegance – Sunday Photo Fiction

  1. Indira says:

    Very sad ending to this beautiful story. Liked the last line. Amazing how well you all write.


  2. Very powerful! I see it as a car accident. He’s in the hospital getting drugs and she has died. Wonderful story!


  3. mandibelle16 says:

    Awful ending to such a promising story. I can see how the image of her broken neck would replay in his nightmares. Not a nice thing to see at all, especially since he cared for her. Thank goodness for the drugs. Great story!


  4. Dale says:

    Noooooooooooooo! I was there with them, like watching a movie, enjoying the lovely exchange between them. Poor guy having to relive that moment over and over… Well done, Sir! xo


  5. Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
    AnElephantCant use delicate doodahs
    To let him near this is a catastrophic mistake
    It is bound to break
    Causing all sorts of heartache
    AnElephant on his best behaviour still has the impact of a major earthquake


  6. I agree with everybody else about the loop being absolutely amazing 🙂


  7. Ally says:

    Ouch. Nicely done.



  8. pure elegance, love it!


  9. luckyjc007 says:

    A very enjoyable read! I love how you described his “trip” and brought him back to reality.


  10. Bastet says:

    I love stories that go in circles like this … fascinating and not a little scary, but wow, really great!


  11. emmylgant says:

    She walks like a dream and he wakes up to a nightmare. .. well done.
    For me the details build the story: the way he pretends, the way she slaps his arm…. and off I go, taken on a longer/other tale.
    I love the way you do that.


  12. Fantastic! I love the way you did that. I love your unseen twists.


  13. Dear CE,

    Once more you’ve twisted a plot and left me mouth agape. First I thought it was a car accident. Looping the story is effective. Well done. .




  14. Steve Lakey says:

    I love the repeat of the first line at the end, but with a completely different meaning. Excellent!

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Martin Flux says:

    Love the way the story loops back on itself with the last line!


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