Elegance – Sunday Photo Fiction

Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in his picture (below).
This week’s hi-tech vision is a work of art.
As is Al’s superb description which, of course, I totally ignore.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and see what others have written.

Copyright Al Forbes

Copyright Al Forbes


I see her coming towards me, smile wide, arms wider.
Man, she walks beautifully.
We embrace, briefly, exchange a modest kiss.
I open the passenger door of the 911 Carrera Cabriolet, watch her slide in.
I do this partly because I am a gentleman, partly because she moves with such elegance, such class.
I clamber over the driver’s door, pretending to be cool and macho.
She laughs, slaps my arm.
We drive down the scenic coast road, towards her favourite restaurant.
I drink her in, perhaps for a split second too long.
The oncoming car drifts on the bend, I am too slow to react.
When my head clears, she looks less elegant.
Her head cannot be at that angle.
I start to scream…
Beep, beep, beep.
The machine feeds me more drugs.
I see her coming towards me, smile wide…

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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33 Responses to Elegance – Sunday Photo Fiction

  1. Indira says:

    Very sad ending to this beautiful story. Liked the last line. Amazing how well you all write.


  2. Very powerful! I see it as a car accident. He’s in the hospital getting drugs and she has died. Wonderful story!


  3. mandibelle16 says:

    Awful ending to such a promising story. I can see how the image of her broken neck would replay in his nightmares. Not a nice thing to see at all, especially since he cared for her. Thank goodness for the drugs. Great story!


  4. Dale says:

    Noooooooooooooo! I was there with them, like watching a movie, enjoying the lovely exchange between them. Poor guy having to relive that moment over and over… Well done, Sir! xo


  5. Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
    AnElephantCant use delicate doodahs
    To let him near this is a catastrophic mistake
    It is bound to break
    Causing all sorts of heartache
    AnElephant on his best behaviour still has the impact of a major earthquake


  6. I agree with everybody else about the loop being absolutely amazing🙂


  7. Ally says:

    Ouch. Nicely done.



  8. pure elegance, love it!


  9. luckyjc007 says:

    A very enjoyable read! I love how you described his “trip” and brought him back to reality.


  10. Bastet says:

    I love stories that go in circles like this … fascinating and not a little scary, but wow, really great!


  11. emmylgant says:

    She walks like a dream and he wakes up to a nightmare. .. well done.
    For me the details build the story: the way he pretends, the way she slaps his arm…. and off I go, taken on a longer/other tale.
    I love the way you do that.


  12. Fantastic! I love the way you did that. I love your unseen twists.


  13. Dear CE,

    Once more you’ve twisted a plot and left me mouth agape. First I thought it was a car accident. Looping the story is effective. Well done. .




  14. Steve Lakey says:

    I love the repeat of the first line at the end, but with a completely different meaning. Excellent!

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Martin Flux says:

    Love the way the story loops back on itself with the last line!


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