She – Six Sentence Story

Artwork by Phil Burns

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – SPARK

Click here to hear the author read his words:


She is a strange and wondrous woman who does things I can scarcely explain with just a small smile and a shrug, and who has knowledge so profound and talents so extraordinary that they are far beyond my comprehension, as well as a quiet and understated beauty that renders me utterly smitten.

When, walking home one night, we are accosted by a crazed youth with a handgun who demands our money, she tells him we are happy to share what we have, and asks how much he needs.

He screams abuse and threatens her with his pistol, so, ignoring her protests, I move to protect her, and feel the bullet crash into my chest.

As I fall mortally wounded I see the despair on her face as she raises her hand towards him and, with a twist of her wrist, causes him to clutch at his heart and fall dead at her feet.

Kneeling beside me with tears in her eyes, she lays that same hand on my chest, and I immediately feel a spark as the wound begins to heal.

My heart breaks as she turns away, and for the rest of my life I will remember Lilith’s parting words: I’m sorry, my love, but you understand why I can’t stay now.

This entry was posted in Sound Bite Fiction and tagged , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

24 Responses to She – Six Sentence Story

  1. Marian Green says:

    oooo!!! what a story on six sentences, And of course she can’t stay.
    Good job.


  2. Liz H says:

    So much magic! ❤ She coulda stayed. He can keep a secret, right?


  3. Bridgette says:

    What a great story!


  4. Nearly got distracted from an intriguing read by disappearing down the rabbit hole of who she was/is on Wackypedia. Methinks an avalanche of ‘Biblical revisionism’ is about to descend on your wee head. 🙂
    PS – I loved Jack Benny’s routine about a similar situation where the robber tells him to hurry up on his decision on ‘your money or your life’ and he says ‘I’m thinking’.


  5. UP says:

    growing UP as I did, Lilith was heresy. Intriguing story.


  6. I wonder where she went, not the Garden of Eden I guess!


  7. Pingback: Six Sentence Story -the Wakefield Doctrine- | the Wakefield Doctrine

  8. ladysighs says:

    I never heard of Lilith. I opened that book once and closed it after the first chapter. Sorry for your loss.


  9. clark says:

    Dude! Adam’s first wife!*

    Weird, but I was very taken with the post image. Nice. (My compliments to Phil)

    *or character eliciting an association with Mr. Eden’s former spouse.


    • ceayr says:

      Thanks, Clark, I frequently use Phil’s artwork to enhance my words.
      I believe her relationship with Adam is based on rumour!

      Liked by 1 person

      • clark says:

        Agree, but then again, taken as a whole (the Olden Testament) also qualifies as rumour.

        but, as rumours go, what’s not to like?

        “Hey Lil, what say we get bizay?”
        “Sorry, not in the mood!”
        “but …but!! you have to, yaeweh said its the way its supposed to be!!”

        {slamming sound of the door (if they had a door)}


  10. Frank Hubeny says:

    She does seem to have mysterious talents of life and death. The youth should have agreed to share or better yet not tried to rob them in the first place.


  11. jenne49 says:

    An intriguing take on the mysterious figure of Lilith, deftly crafted to allow the immediacy of the action and emotion, and all that without a single superfluous word. Excellent story.


Leave your Sound Bite here

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.