My Father – Six Sentence Story

Artwork by Phil Burns

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – PRESENCE

Click here to hear the author read his words:

My Father

He was a strange one, my father, not a good man, particularly, but not a bad one either.
Although he never raised a hand to us, and seldom his voice, there was a sort of air about him that meant you walked carefully in his presence.
He lived somewhat in the shadows, I felt, as though things happened around him, rather than to him.
There was something a bit, ah, clandestine about him, as if, perhaps, he had another life.
I always wondered if he was a good guy, like a secret agent, or a baddie, a gangster, maybe.
I guess now I’ll never know.

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23 Responses to My Father – Six Sentence Story

  1. Oooh, that was a good one. I really liked the line “as though things happened around him, rather than to him.”


  2. Powerful, cool and mysterious. Love the Phil B art too, and totally got that 007 vibe with the brill touch of that added symbol ☮✌


  3. clark says:

    Don’t tell anyone, but I was getting a James Joyce vibe when reading, which is odd, because I can’t say I know that much about his work, other than some Cliff Note visits to Ulysses and Finnegan’s Wake…
    Good Six


  4. Yay. Story time at SBF. Seriously, C.E.. Simple and eloquent, words and voice, telling of the first relationship most of us have – the one with a parent. Splendid Six.


  5. Even living with them for years, people can be a mystery.


  6. Lindsey says:

    Ooh! Very poignant. I felt quite tearful about the distance between them and the lost opportunity for possibility. Love this.


  7. Chris Hall says:

    Wistful, rather romantic and really well conveyed. Great Six!


  8. Liz H says:

    Dads can be like that. Moms, too.
    Wonder what our children see/wonder in us?


  9. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like the doubt raised about whether one’s father was a secret agent good guy or not and the sense of regret at the end that it is now too late to find out.


  10. UP says:

    Really, really well done


  11. jenne49 says:

    The story of a boy’s non-relationship with his father in six short sentences.
    Strong language conveys his feelings about this – and with not one word too many.
    A great piece of writing.


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