This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – EFFERVESCENT
Click here to hear the author read his words:
Robbery
Concerned that Ron, my usually ebullient younger brother is not his normal effervescent self, I decide to follow him.
Wearing a cap, sunglasses and a Covid mask he goes to the supermarket car park, nicks a mid-range Ford, and picks up three dubious-looking characters similarly attired.
He drives them to the High Street and pulls up outside a high end jewellery shop, where his colleagues shuffle out, look furtively around, then dive into the store waving guns.
I call 999, tell the forces of law and order that there is an armed robbery in progress.
Then I stroll to Ron’s vehicle and get into the passenger seat, grinning at his astonished expression.
Drive, I say.
No blood thicker than that between brothers. Delightful!
Thanks, Liz.
Sometimes it’s not just the blood that’s thick!
Truth!
Loved this, C.E. Lean and to the point, your “bare bones” Six tells us all we need to know.
Ron’s lucky to have an older brother (with an excellent sense of humor) looking out for him.
Glad you enjoyed, Denise, I am loving this new challenge after years of 100-word stories at Rochelle’s excellent Friday Fictioneers.
Totally different way to express thoughts, a welcome change, I’m glad it’s working for you and your readers too.
Super six! Spot on storytelling without a word wasted.
Thanks, Chris.
Glad you enjoyed my YouTube too!
(Laughing again!)
excellent scene/Six! energetic, draws us Readers right in and pulls us along to a fun twist on the ending… could totally ‘see it’*
*highest of compliments in Sixville
Glad it worked for you, Clark.
High compliment much appreciated
Something tells me Ron will be feeling much more effervescent now that his big brother saved his neck.
That’s what brothers do, Pat!
They are going to get caught. I like how he is looking out for his younger brother.
Some younger brothers need looking out for.
I know, I was one!
Wow! Well done.
I like ‘Wow!’
Thanks, Mimi
Top shelf work, ceayr. A mini crime show episode in six sentences. Loved it.
Thanks, Doug, it’s surprising how much can be said in six sentences
great writing. good use of the cue.
Thank you, sir
This is such a clear, fun piece of writing.
You ‘stroll’ through the story with no extra words and give a full picture of the escapade and the character of the two bothers.
Fabulous.
Thanks, Jenne, we all need someone to look after us
Love it… a gem of a tale written so very well!
Thank you, Susan, glad you enjoyed