Green for Go – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by
Na’ama Yehuda.
And it can be read, if you choose, as part of the prequel to last week’s story.

© Na’ama Yehuda


Click here to hear the author read his words:

Green for Go

She punches me in the mouth.
It is unexpected, and brutal.
I taste blood, my tongue probing at the loosened teeth.
She slips outside, into the night.
I wait, tense.
I listen for gunshots.
There is nothing.
Silence.
I start to relax…

Crack!
The bark of a single shot.
Much nearer than I expect.
The door flies open.
The officer strides in, expression strained and pistol drawn.
When he sees my burst lips his own twist slightly.
A resourceful woman, your wife, he says.
He stumbles unsteadily against the wall.
His open greatcoat reveals the gaping wound in his stomach.

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56 Responses to Green for Go – Friday Fictioneers

  1. MrBinks says:

    Very nice.
    Where can we read the longer piece?

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  2. Mike says:

    This seems like one determined women. I am sending in Hercule Poirot

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  3. James McEwan says:

    A moment of betrayal, revenge and escape with a mysterious woman on the run. This is easily set, for me, in either revolutionary Russia, or in occupied France for instance.
    I like how your recital adds more drama to the event.

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  4. Bill says:

    Tension and mystery right there. Well done.

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  5. doodletllc says:

    My question…why was he saved this time? Feeing might be his best course of action.

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  6. Natasha says:

    Holy cow!!!

    That was a double whammy!
    Nicely done, yes! way too nicely done, I say.

    C.E. what’s on her mind?

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  7. plaridel says:

    lesson learned. never get involved in domestic dispute.

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  8. What’s her name, Six-Gun Sally?

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  9. draliman says:

    Ouch. I thought the police officer had shot her. Nice one!

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  10. Very dramatic rendition of everyday domestic violence. Well written, CE.

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  11. Wonderful story. Very visceral.

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  12. Oy, I don’t want her as my neighbor. Yikes, she’s not a good one to be around. Not a nice one, that one (though your story is well done!)

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  13. That was ace, first place too, is that 2 weeks in a row? This series obviously suits you! Brilliant stuff

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  14. wmqcolby says:

    Ah, love! Shoots you in the mouth and gets you in the gut.
    Five out of five rifle cracks for this one, CE. Packed a wallop!

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  15. It’s the reverse of ‘Porphyria’s Lover’

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  16. granonine says:

    Holy buckets! Well, I missed last week, so I need to go back and find the story that led to this brutal tale. Well done, CE. Even though she’s apparently a bad girl, I find I’m on her side. Strange.

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  17. We asked for more, you gave us more and I for one am asking for yet more!

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  18. Oh, that was so unexpected and now I want to know why she did it! You captured the atmosphere really well.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  19. Chilling! And brutal!

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  20. Iain Kelly says:

    She did do it after all. Perfect start to a gritty noir.

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  21. davezart says:

    wow. what a great little story. By sheer co-incidence, my story is also about domestic violence, woman on the man. I took a different view, but I love your story.
    Dave
    https://s00156364.wordpress.com/2020/07/01/im-out-of-here-friday-fictioneers/

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  22. Dear CE,

    That was certainly grisly.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  23. Sandra says:

    There’s domestic abuse and then there’s this. Very powerful. I’ll give her a miss.

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  24. neilmacdon says:

    Now that’s one hell of an opening

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  25. Tannille says:

    What charmer… Even women can be violent, the untold story.

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